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my very first sweet joy

you were my very first sweet joy cause
birthed,I breathed your spicey orange
then my tiny whiney nose hid lost
under your neck,those seeking
lips smacked dry,you gently
led to a honeyed-warmth 
your cotton breast,
orange kisses you
whispered,then
showed my raw
soul how to
love, I
thank
you
mom



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  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 27
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    This is so lovely

    Bravo and what a loving vision you give the reader with this poem


  • abuyi
    April 14, 2008

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    its a very special write.. its very nice of you to write this for your mom, i know many who take their parents for granted. as a poet i see lot of potential, its not easy to express freely about someone you admire and love and you did with such simplicity... also i like the term spicy orange..its a rare combination.. but why you say 'spicy'(typo) i suggest you to rephrase your second line.. its not very clear.. wish you luck and prosperity hope your pen never goes off ink and paper regards abdulla


    • simpliciti
      April 15, 2008
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      thank you

      thank you for your comments and taking the time to read and comment on some of my other poems. All the best to you