This night, the stars shone so brightly against the black curtain of night
and your eyes were so dark, even though we were right under the moon.
I couldn't help but stare at you as you gazed at the sky,
I notice your features... brown hair that frames your well defined face
and eyes the color of steel - so cold and forbidden to emotion,
those lips of yours even form words perfectly;
"I want to take a break.
I want to see other girls.
I need some time on my own.
You understand..."
*sigh*
People always talk about how earth shattering it is
when your heart breaks,
but i'd never really believed in all of that.
Until tonight.
You told me how you just wanted a break; a month at most.
How you wanted the option for other girls;
how I wasn't enough for you - how you'd rather be with other girls.
I listen but I don't speak.
These tears are so hard to keep in, and I can barely swallow.
Hell, I can barely breathe.
I just keep staring straight up at that sky.
Your words echo through my head - their weight so heavy and hard,
I can't see those stars so clearly anymore, my love,
my vision is blurred - I can't hold in these tears.
You try to reassure me but I've already gone -
It's true what they say;
You can actually feel your heart shatter.
It's only a month, you say,
but I've tucked my knees into my arms,
I've bowed my head and I weep endlessly.
Never have I let someone see so much emotion come pouring out of me,
but I can't hold it in; my love is gone.
My world... you were my world!
Everything... you meant so much to me, and you turned
and walked away.
You didn't even look back.
You've left me here alone and afraid.
I'm not as strong as I pretend to be, my dear,
and though you may not have known it would happen,
everything has turned on me.
My world
imploded.
How can it be
that you meant so much to me
and yet I apparently didn't mean anything to you?
You know I'm selfless, and you know that's so unfair.
I say it's fine - I say whatever makes you happy.
You say you're glad I understand,
but if only you knew.
My vision is still blurred... this endless downpour of tears neverending.
This pain is pain I've never before experienced.
So raw
and deep is this agony.
This pain that one feels
when your heart [shatters]
Author notes
Um... real life experience. And yes, this did actually happen to me on the night that I wrote this uhm 4-4-08...
You asked for pain, and to me this is the most pain there's ever been.
A contest entry
- I saw eternity in your eyes.... by InfiniteCaitlin.
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I love this part:
"I'm not as strong as I pretend to be, my dear,
and though you may not have known it would happen,
everything has turned on me.
My world
imploded.
How can it be
that you meant so much to me
and yet I apparently didn't mean anything to you?"
I just recently went through the same thing and this really grip me from start to finish. great job.
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good
i thought it was a vary good poem it had plenty of emotions in it. =} -
And so you feel Sorrow's cold embrace as it tries to fill that empty space, but will you be a loving fool and try to find another love for you?
The introduction is a bit slow, but after you say "*sigh*" it really starts to pick up. Then towards the end from "My vision" to "so raw" it seems to take a dip until you hit the very last lines where it seems to suck me in again and feel a powerful ending.
Great Write, I really enjoyed it.
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Intense write. Obviously true. Great imegery. really pulls you into this sorrow story. It is ... almost the story of a very close friend of mine. I held her crying for months. Stay strong. great write of honesty. Good luck in your contest.
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this so far is one of the most detailed poems i have been able to read! i agree with every word that is said..and i have also gone through it...you do feel the world shatter..and your heart begins to break..slowly..and the pain undescribable...great writting..i loved it..!! good luck in my contest!!
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Thank you so much!
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Great expression.
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this is a painful poem!!!its deff. frm the heart i enjoyed reading this long poem. great flow too it check mine out x x x
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i realy like your poem you can tell you have a natural tallent in writing poems you said it from your heart which makes it better.i really enjoyed reading this.
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Thank you!
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wow... this is sooo good. im not gonna lie... it made me cry too. seriously. i am so sorry hun. god d is such a dick
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I'm sorry to hear you have gone through this. Its never easy to deal with being dumperd by someone you are in love with. You just have to keep your chin up and realize theat there are others out there more willing to be with you. I really liked the poem and its gonna straight to a sore spont in myself.
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Thank you, Danny.
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