A butterfly,
on a beautiful rose.
Doth it speak to me?
In it's own words
It does,
I suppose,
As it flutters
Around my knee.
I am nowhere.
I cant be bothered now.
This is a new place for me.
It is not the "Plains" "Reality" or "Between."
But a place that is better than any of the three.
Tall grass waves gracefully
As a gut of a breeze comes through,
With wildflowers all around.
I lay here comfortably
By myself
But a young woman
She calls my name.
Her voice sounds familiar
And it brings no pain.
This is my girlfriend.
I love her so much,
Its almost vain.
Under the old willow tree,
Still I am.
I hope she truly understands,
That i love her more than life.
If ever I do something wrong,
She helps me to make it right.
As I am still sitting here,
I see a smile
Start to shine on her bautiful face.
Until she sees my face.
And she realizes why I am here,
Why I am grieving.
And that I am truly lonely
Because everything,
Even her,
Was just a crumbling,
Fading,
Hopeful dream.
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In loving Memory of the Love of My Life.
Written March 30th, 2003
A contest entry
- who am I ? by maa.
333 points, ended June 15, 2006, 12 entries
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dear borncarnut,
thank you so much for participating in the contest.
your poem is very beautiful and your words are heartfelt and sincere. there is so much gentleness and sensitivity in your writing.
when you share with us the place of your refuge inside of you, it is such an intimate moment of sharing your peace and bliss.
I am nowhere.
I cant be bothered now.
This is a new place for me.
It is not the "Plains" "Reality" or "Between."
But a place that is better than any of the three.
when you conclude your poem with :
Because everything,
Even her,
Was just a crumbling,
Fading,
Hopeful dream.
it is really touching, because, even if you say you grieve and feel lonely at the discovery of this universal truth, you have revealed words of wisdom in those few words, and for this I thank you.
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100000 dead roses for you
wow.... so sad so deep
rsoe I am sorry you and me share the same pain
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kewlness
Holy shamolies! WOw! You rock! Keep in touch babe! Love me! -
Damn Bro Now I See what u mean Sorry for your loss..
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I'm so sorry for your loss. I hope in time, you find healing and release from your pain and are able to move forward and smile once again. All the best to you always.
Your Friend,
Lily ~* -
awww ::hugs:: im so sorry you ever had to go through that...i dont know what i would do if i ever lost a bf...or even an ex bf for that matter...you share so much...Sarah
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I know how much you loved her its clear in this peice so much untold depth and so much it could be.. so much it should be... i cant say much more then its heart breaking... ~Dragonia~
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awesome
This was so amazingly beautiful!!!!!! I loved it, you made it so peaceful yet heartwrenching at the same time. I'm sure that she is looking down on you and that she is very proud of you and the way that you honored her memory. I know I am,I really respect that and I find it admirable. It's nice to get to see how you truly felt and be able to understand and share in that with you. I love you, Ben. Jenny -
great
WOW! This poem is great. I was pulled in at the beginning, it had me feeling every emotion that you probably felt. That is what makes a poem great: the ability to have your readers feel what you do. GOOD JOB KEEP WRITING!!
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