soft and warm and sweet it was
the rain as it crashed down
and all that i could think to do
was sit and cry and drown
remembering the days so sweet
that i had let fly by
and wishing that for just this once
I'd stopped and waved good-bye
and here i am all tired and lost
looking for ways to cope
every time i think I'm saved
this rain washes out my hope
so i give up and let it pour
just sit here and get soaked
and swim in all my misery
the pain this rain evoked
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Written December 9th, 2003
by rainwalker
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Thank you for entering my contest. I really liked the structure of this poem, and the wonderful rhyming. The message of it was also very good. I love the connection of rain and sadness or pain. Great job and good luck
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Talented indeed
Out standing poem.
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Talented
I really enjoyed this, third verse i enjoyed, I like your way with words..no critisim needed...I love it!
Last verse, brilliant ending xx
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Great last line... your flow is spot on. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Awsome. Love these lines:
so i give up and let it pour
just sit here and get soaked
and swim in all my misery
the pain this rain evoked
For some reason I'm falling in love with your rhyme scheme and your flowing lol. Call me weird I don't care. Take care. victoria -
This is a very impressive first posted piece. Rhyming schemes are always hit or miss. But this one is spot on. Your flow eases the reader through the poem nicely.
You also crafted your imagery well too. Readin' this you can picture the speaker lamenting days gone by and then further feeling dejected by the oncoming rain.
Great work! *pokes applaud button*
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I loved this poem and this part really just spoke volumes.
remembering the days so sweet
that i had let fly by
and wishing that for just this once
I'd stopped and waved good-bye
*Keep up the great work*
Kahy
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Loved the flow .. it's sad, but so often I find that rain does that to us. anyway I really liked it and good luck!
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This is a very moving write. Many thanks for your entry - a very enjoyable read
Best wishes for the contest, James 
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how very poignant this write is. You have mirrored my own thoughts so many times in my life. I can relate to this so much. Also I want to commend you on a fine rhyme pattern and flow.
This touched my heart!
Blessings ~Frog -
I was captured by the feelings in this poem...this is really good!..excellent job!
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wow this is great! nice flow but, too bad im not a big fun of rhyming.... if is it okay with you would you spare some time and read some of my works?
Gothic Angel
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wow, this is great. I love the rain too! Nice flow and rhyming. Good job.
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Awesomely Awesome
Hey, I came to comment only because it was in your contest rules, but I found much more. I really like the emotion you put into writing this poem. Some people write just to be acknowledged but you really pour your soul into your work. I am grateful to know that I'm not the only one who cares about his/her writing. Great job. Btw, your gorgeous! =)*Brownie Points* -
So sad and poignent it makes one feel like crying, however so well written with style, flow, rhythm and rhyme it would be hard not to like it. And I do.
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Good Job!! lol, Joking. It was really good, I like the flow. It was very emotional. I can all too often relate. excellent poem.
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i really like reading poems that i can relate to and this one is another one of those that i deffinitly relate to. i have had so many hopes and dreams that just got washed away and that i gave up on. this is a great poem... good write and kieep up the good writings.
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pleasing to the mind and heart
I completely understand the feeling of rain being both a destroyer and a means of cleansing...things...people...words...feelings.I love this poem.Ohhhh...and you are sooo lovely..wanted to be sure I interjected that before going.Keep up the good work. -
deep
This is simply beautiful-soft ,sad and emotion evoking-your words flow and pour out your sorrow very effectively.You have immense talent.Thank you for sharing this with us. -
Wow..for some reason I felt in part the sadness associated with the rain and how at times the drops along the glass resemble endless tears simply running down...there are a lot of metaphores that can be associated with your write, and (yeah, I'm a kid of the 80's so dont laugh about this) there's this old pop group called A-ha..they have a song that i think is from other author, called 'I'll do my crying in the rain'...Indiana has overcast skies sometimes in summer and most of winter, but to me, after living 10 years in a desertic place...well, it never stops amazing me to see so much water, which can take and give life at the same time...Excellent write, it also made me remember a poem i have called Raindrops...~ Juan Anguas
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i thought that this poem was really great. i love the way it flowed. you have a great gift, keep writing.
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this was such a beautiful poem. i have a thing for rain as well, i looove rain and all that comes with it, the smell the sound, the feeling of it as it soaks you. i like to dance in it too. like your poem, a lot of people associate rain with sadness, but to me there is beauty in rain that can bring happiness too, it makes me happy. but i really like the comparision you made in this poem with the tears and rain. poem flowed really well too... keep up the good work.!
p.s. im a hopeless romantic too, i want to be kissed in the rain like in movies! hehe just a little insight into my dream... -
This is a very beautiful poem. I could feel the words as they washed over me like the rain in your poem. Each word splashed against my skin leaving a mark that traced a path to my heart. I loved the sound I heard as I read I could hear the noise of a beating heart against the rain falling on the ground. The rhyming pattern really helped the flow of the piece. I loved every word and sentiment. There is garce in this cleansing write!
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Poetic Perfection
This was just exquisite. The rhythm is hypnotic and carries the reader from beginning to end. I doubt there is anyone that has not lived this... When you just have to give in to the sadness, let it have it's way. Thanks for sharing this one...bookmarking it.
Maddie
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May your rain of pain turn to rain of love pouring from the hightest from the heavens above.
Nice write yet so sad -
very beautiful poem, i love it, very good write, i love poems relating to rain because rain is really emotional to a lot of people. good write, i love this one
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i feel like that. everytime i get happy... juuuust for a momenet. this new thing comes up and it bad... oh god... its always bad. and i get sad again. its like i can never stay happy for more them a couple hours. this really makes me feel better cuz i can relate.. but ill probably feeel sad in a bit again. someone will probably tell me somethign horrible. *sigh* just waiting...............
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I enjoyed this immensely ... It has an easy flowing style that makes it very readable. The rhyming is excellent as it just "rolls along" ...
Thank you for sharing,
Take every care,
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wow i loved this poem. it was raining by me today and i like the rain. im sorry that has nothing to do with your poem does it? well i dont know what else to say but i really liked it!
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This is so good, Very well put together and gave me a totaly different view of rain. Real meaning and depth. Excellent piece of work . Keep pening.
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It made me cry, therefore, incredible
Wow... just wow. Come use my umbrella Laura. You know there's always room for you with me. -
This was a lovely piece. It is graceful in its self pity and slides smoothly from one stanza to the next. This is a little gem. It is almost elegant as it morosely pats away on the readers heart. I liked that very much
David
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lush
nice write, its very sad. i agree that the best thing to metaphorically change emotion in to, is water, it can be nice, and quench ur "thirst" but it can also drown you. a lot of emotions are repetative, and never leave, or so iv found so far, but now they just seem like routine, something u have to go through, so y, since we understand this does it have to come to back?, anyways, great poem, keep ya head up. ~*xXx*~ -
Great
A wonderful bit of poetry here. Something I can't put my finger on drew me in, and had me soaking in the rain along with you. Great job!
Best wishes,
Hoosier writer & poet,
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wow, i love this poem, it's awsome!! it reminds me of what i did this summer..i ran away and since i live in the mountains i was hiking in the middle of nowhere and it started pouring so for 2 hours i just sat in the rain and thought about life and stuff. but enough about me, you don't care...but good write, good luck in the contest...check out some of my stuff sometime. peace
hannah -
This was well rhymed and written. It really tugged these old heartstrings! Thanks for sharing!
Naena
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Very nicely done! It's odd, this has a real "bounce" to it
just like the rain falling on the ground!
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Let the rain come,we need it here in Australia,so I cry tears of joy when it rains as we are in the grip of a drought and bushfires.
Very well written,enjoyed it~Angelica
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when it rains problems it pours troubles....
lots of great imagery here.
well done.
Sam
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Hey! I like this poem a lot! I love the rain as well...I read that you loved rain in your authors page. Too bad I live in Texas where it doesnt rain as much.
Love the way you let the rain wash over you, not really giving up, but accepting...this gave me a feeling of peace, maybe Im strange...but I really love this poem, and I admire your style, seems I cant rhyme too well when it comes time for me to write a poem. All in all, very well done!
blueyes
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i really enjoyed this, the rhyme and meter were perfectly executed. i really love even more how this poem's theme sort of ties into your user name(rainwalker). its a very sweet and meaningful piece, and i would really like to thank you for sharing it with us. i look foreword to reading more, and i think i shall now.
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yes i really liked this and the little cute verses and the innocence in it. wish i had stopped and waved goodbye struck a chord within me as the past rushes by and its hard to stay in the present. the good bits of the past i tend to think i didnt fully appreciate at the time. lovely the way you wrote this.
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wow i can toatally relate... but when you said "every time i think I'm saved" did you mean like in a religious way or from the rain? im just wondering... it stuck out to me. but very good write! keep a writin!
shadylane
p.s. id appriciate if you returned the favor.
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Um. yeah. this is probably one of the best images ive ever felt from a poem. i really am stunned. i think im gonna write about this one. wow.
yeah. : clicks and puts on favorites :
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The words flow so nicely together...its very sad but I often feel like this.. Great job.
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"remembering the days so sweet
that i had let fly by
and wishing that for just this once
I'd stopped and waved good-bye"
Best stanza right there... Just love it. I've had many times like that where I just wished I had that chance.. just that one chance.
This poem flows very nicely and was beautifully written. You've captured the feelings of lonliness with rain.. I never thought I'd see it as that.. awesome job!!!
~Aimee
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very endearing write. to wash everything away with rain, or to make things worse when the rain comes....either way it can be seen. very talented write, I wish you luck in the contest
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You have a lot of talent for someone so young. Nice tight write, sad but nicely written.
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wonderful
i really like this one. the rhyming keeps the poem moving, and it has a true sense of nostalgia throughout the entire poem. your allusion to loneliness by using rain is great, the imagery is amazing.. i don't even know what else to say.
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Nice write! Rain always makes me so alone. You have great meter as well.
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I am amazed with this, the words flow with grace. A splendid write if I my say so, then rhyming was apt & the content was lush. Like the new blades that grow after the precipitation has fallen.
Thankyou for giving my day such a beautiful Silver linning
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Excellent
I am not sure how to comment on this piece. Other than it is very good, I don't know what to say. I could say I know how you feel, but you might not believe me. Or I could go into a long spiel about what I liked about it. Or I could just say I like it...the whole thing...it is excellent. -
This poem is very good. I really love the images it invokes. I'm a very visual person, and I could alomost feel the rain. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Excellent
Past regrets is something I think most everyone can relate to. You did a fine job expressing the all to familiar, "would ofs" or "could ofs".
After reading the last line my first thought was, I sure hope she/he can get back up and brush themselves off. I guess you can say I personally related to this piece. -
great rythmn set in this one... flows very well from one verse to the next and stanza to stanza. your rhyme scheme is very tight and overall it has a nice sound to it when read aloud.
overall, I'm not much for the kind of theme where one is exploring emotions that tie into pain so clearly... But! Yes, I do like this and think you did a very good job overall in its presentation.
The strongest part of this... overall, I think you nailed the structure down very well as far as the technical aspect. Pretty good choice of words on this one too. 'Keep 'em coming.
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I LOVE the way you said all that... drowing in tears and such. Great write mate!
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Rain...you could write so much about rain...it is so subtle...if you just mention it in your poem you will still have the "rain" effect...for me rain is a wonderful thing that makes everything better...or just cries with me...it always inspires me and apparently it inspires you too...great work...
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wow i read all ur poems but i like this one the most. i mixes a feeling with something that everyone can imagine. the rain can be expressed as many things but the way u expressed it gives me an image of someone washing away the pain in the falling "sweet rain" i love it!
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I love the rain. It washes away all the pain. This was lovely, by the way.
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Good
Sometimes that is the best thing to do. Quit fighting and let it all out and then let GO and let God. Usually when I do that things get better but if I thrash and fight I wear myself out. After my mother died quite by accident I turned on TV during Joel Osteen's motivational speaking of www.joelosteen.com and just in the nick of time. I had not boot straps left to boot strap it back up. I watched him 4 times a week just to keep my mind on the positive path so I didn't set up camp again in my despair. I let go and admitted my pain was more than I could bear. I hope if this poem of speaks of what sounds like equal despair that you find lots of resources for finding more than ways to cope and also finding hope.
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Oh wow. This poem is just wonderful. It speaks to well to me and everything is clear. I love this poem very much and I hope to see more of your works. I'll have to go check out more of your works rainwalker. Keep writing and thanks for sharing!
~dark
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