Approaching the sunset of your corruptive animation,
Do you fear the almighty do you contemplate damnation?
The way you treat others makes me question your salvation
and I fear for your soul through your lack of preparation.
You cannot comprehend your own inflicted aberrations,
blaming others actions for your cruel abominations,
your selective memory is your conscience's creation
but can it save your soul in the ultimate location?
you abused your own kids, destroyed a whole generation
yet you have no regret not a morsel of sensation.
If I were in your place I would feel much trepidation
to God, on bended knee, I would crawl in desperation.
Author notes
Written December 9th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
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excellent
wow!!! i must say this is
one of the best poems i
have come across, awsome write -
amazing rhyming i enjoyed reading this.
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bravo-ations my dear- good work!
david -
Excelent
wow either your a preacher or your just extremely smart! This is an excelent poem. YOu had amazing flow too. Must have a lot of experience in the writting field. Great job. You will probably do well in this contest. -
depth in words
i am jealous, to be able to find that many rhyming words that all perfectly fit is absolutly amazing, not one word seems out of place. i could never do that nice job -
wow... this is very powerful, perfect for this contest! i absolutely love the repetition of "tion" words... it adds power and flow to keep the reader hooked in... great great write! best of luck!
)O( neuentag
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This was nifty. I love the rhyming of the words at the end, it add this funky little beat to it. Good job and good luck.
Amanda -
is a very good write,rhyme scheme and rhythm are so nice writen and with flow, good luck on the contest,take care
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pretty good poem..thanks for entering my contest!
luve,
sweethart -
greaty
awwww this piece was great, i love the wya it is written, it's a really good piece, thanks for entering and happy V-Day!!!
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Awsome
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fantastic rhyme scheme and rhythm. I'm amazed that you fit twelve end rhymes into one poem and still stayed on the subject. That's a gift. Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck!
~*~Kat C~*~ -
all that and a bag of chips
i was so blow away. that was such a good write. and me being a christian can really grasp this poem. i loved the way you rhymed cause i am a rhymer but you rhymed big words. and they all made sence in the sentace. i give you major kudo's, cookies, props what have you at this most totally awesome write. going on my favorites. thanks for showin us how anger is done gracefully....
lostsoul -
this is really good. the plurals take away from a perfect rhyme scheme, but I will have to ponder abit....
thanks again for entering.
Sam
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oh my this is so awsome...i love it i love it....great job...peace be with you always..GOOD LUCK..happy holidays..DI
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excellent
This was perfectly done! The theme was lucid and true throughout, and there were no snags in meter or flow. I think you did an excellent job with this piece. Bravo! Thanks for sharing this fascinating and thought provoking poem.
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whoa...too true. this was a great write...really very good. a nice scary soul-searching piece...the "ation" really gives it a feeling of heaviness...
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THis is really really good. Excellent write.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Sam
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