after the fall,
somehow I always
arrive after
the fall.
my glory days
are always so
brief.
nevertheless,
I have them and
they are quite resplendent.
the vivid autumn leaves
are still in my memory, when
the seduction was all around.
all my senses, aroused by
my opening heart, blossomed
into the extending existence
around me.
that dream still captivates
me, for now
hopefully,
coming closer to the end of
my selfish spectrum, my
innate desire is
to hear,
once again, the
song of the sensuous,
as it arises
&ceases ...
beginning again.
Author notes
Image Prompt Choice :
Ruby by=TheTragicTruth-Of-Me
http://www.deviantart.com/print/2248981/
A contest entry
- Art Inspiration!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
687 points, ended April 11, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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An interesting take on the prompt chosen. Pondering the inner depths. Thank you so much for your entry!
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How beautifully you painted the image. The tale that lie within. Seduction, passion, and growth. You are indeed an artist.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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I love how even your darker poetry is always positive. There aren't many people who can really pull that off.
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Liked this poem, the brevity of the lines, the flow, the thoughts and sentiments shared so well in these words. Liked your interpretation of the picture prompt you chose to inspire.
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Great job,and take on the prompt.
Very nice creativity put into this bro.
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Good cadence and word choice
Strong poem. The structure is interesting and your slant rhyme is impressive. Why resplendent? It just not a word I see very often. This works with a strange kind of inarticulate loss of ... I really like that, elemental and moving. -
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thank you for your comment. why resplendent? in the previous stanza, I speak about my glory days. I wanted to use a word signifying brilliance and also, a luxurious word; like someone soaking in glory. resplendent fit. thanks again for your comment.
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I love the rhythm
Again, these are lines that pull at me in a very basic way.
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thank you for your comments. I am glad that this work resonates with you . I try to express myself in a very basic way, flesh and blood insights about my experiences.
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"all my senses, aroused by/my opening heart, blossomed/into the extending existence" - beautiful lines. I feel myself in this poem.
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The first set in this really grabs the reader's attention, a strong start is important, and this is about as strong as they come, I like the last set as well, "Beginning again" it sends the reader back to the top of the page to begin again, nice write, ya done good.
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I like this poem alot. The first lines captured my interest.
after the fall,
somehow I always
arrive after
the fall.
my glory days
are always so
brief.
This is a great expression.
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