The tree talks to me like it has something to say
as if it had seen war like it was yesterday
The tree tells a story with its lines engraved
like when the soldiers walked past they stopped and waved
wondering which ones will be saved
The tree starts to cry
as it sees all the bullets fly
hitting the men and causing then to die
The grass is green the sky dark gray
watching the bodies on the ground as they lay
and have nothing left to say
the bodies lay still
not able to feel
or wanting to ever kill
what did those soldiers ever do
did they even do anything to you?
If only you knew the families that have now lost someone
not even knowing yet if their side won
and others wonder if they will again see the sun
They risk their lives for us today
ot ever knowing if they’ll even see the next day
or if they’ll always be okay
They don’t know what to expect
especially with the dialect
They all know basically what goes on in war
before they join with the other ones
shooting with some guns
scared even before the war has begun
They are brave
Author notes
The object I chose is a tree. Please comment!
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Comments
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I really like the concept of a tree's witnessing a battle scene and questioning the validity of war. In some places, I think you could edit to tighten up excess or awkward wording. I was a bit confused by the last line as it seemed to depart from the rest of the poem which talks of the chaos, confusion, and heartache of war. All in all, a very good poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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