Enraging torrents of moments of immobilization,
Lost forever in ruins of the clock of time.
Silenced by screams of sudden-struck terror,
Grains of non-existence forever etched in my mind.
Encouraging bouts of non-ceasing stillness,
Sour expression with negative descriptions fall hand in hand.
Experiences with several but no eclipses,
Show intricate designs crafted with nothing but sand.
Emotions spun wild and chaos begins,
Showered and sprinkled drops of tears cascade.
Eternity is restless with fate of what will be,
Grey clouds of silence are what we are left to face.
A contest entry
- Proudly Presenting: ROUND 1 by Walk-Free.
1000 points, ended August 31, 2008, 78 entries
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Tell me what you think please!
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wow!
i'm blown away by this one! it was intense and deep and the metaphors used were simply stunning! a very outstanding write, and it was perfectly well expressed! keep penning, and thanks so much for the entry!
~beauty of silence
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wow. this is a great piece. love how you expressed the feelings here; and i love the words that you so well chose. my favourite lines were these:
Emotions spun wild and chaos begins,
Showered and sprinkled drops of tears cascade.
great piece of work here. i simply loved this. -
Thw words you have put together here are excellent. I especially like "grains of non existence forever etched in my mind" how many of us can relate.......a great write.
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Thanks so much for commenting!
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"Encouraging bouts of non-ceasing stillness,
Sour expression with negative descriptions fall hand in hand.
Experiences with several but no eclipses,
Show intricate designs crafted with nothing but sand."
wonderful poem, this is my fav part, well written with good choice of words
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