Imagine, the way a velvet rose petal feels,
when gently swiped across the cheek; across the lips.
It feels that way when your,
lips brush softly across mine;
slowly down my cheek, and down my body
with a fiery passion, that you only hold for me.
When your hands caress my every curve,
and pull my hips against your own,
I feel a powerful jolt of excitement,
and want to fill your every desire.
When our bodies are entwined,
I feel as if we are one person,
with the same mentality, the same passion...
and the love that proves we should be.
A contest entry
- Love Poetry Please by FallingTwilight.
390 points, ended April 16, 2008, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow i love this its great
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Awww I bet your boyfriend really enjoyed this write, this is really intense also, like music that never really stops, a song that is sung just for you two.
This was great and I really liked the beginning drew me in and left me wanting more.
Love is as beautiful as music.
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WOW this is very good and sweet!!!
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Beautiful poem, it's wonderfully poetic and I feel and hear the passion as I read it. Well Done!!!!!
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Whew! You definitely need to drag him to the beach
Love the romantic, sensuous feel of this - tastefully beautiful!!
best wishes in your contest.
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Awww beautiful. Very well-written. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck,
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first off, good luck with your contest i know ull win
second this was a bloody fantastic poem i enjoyed it from beginning to end! -sigh- i wish i had this kind of love...
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Wow
Very well written This is exactly how I feel about my boyfriend. I think that anyone who reads this and is this in love will know exactly what this feels like and can relate to it. Great job
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hey i loved this poem i sent a coment on it and i probley sounded like a moreon i just couldnt get my words right so i just wrote it all down *lol*
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wow i love it its intense and powerful and so truth telling its just wow amazing awsome and just i loved reading it it gets your attention you can feel the feelings in the poem its just love thats all it is and that one word is the mean thang that makes it what it is you wrote it in the moment every detail its just just keep writing i love reading all your poems thanks for sharing with us veiwers
love your veiwer
kathy aka scarred for life16
p.s.
love it never stop writing never stop doing what your good at your so talented
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Ultimate love!
This was wonderful! I felt the connection in your words.
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This is simply amazing. I loved it every single lovely, well penned word of it. The imagery is amazing and the emotion just drips from the page!
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Wonderful!
I'm surprised no one has commented this poem yet. I think its beautiful and simple, to the point and the heart of your work. I can really relate to this poem, and everything I feel for the love of my life was expressed in your work. I love the metaphor in the first stanze with the rose. All in all, a lovely poem.
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