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love you more

there are so many things i have to say
about my love for you
if i had to sum up how i feel about you it's too much to count
just being with you makes me happy
i love your smile which make me melt in the puddle
and your gaze makes me so nervous i can't keep still
i get excited just seeing you
how i wish you were with me
you're so caring, loving, compassionate, sensitive, mature, and you make me feel so right
your face is what i dream of every night
i love everything about you
i miss hearing your voice
it's what i look forward to hearing everyday
and i also love how you hold me tight
it makes me so warm and happy
and toasty like a marshmallow
i love your creative side
it lets me see how you think
and i especially love your clumsy side
it's so cute and besides no one is perfect
the way i feel about you will never end
being so understanding and modest
that's one of the reasons why i love you more

Author notes

ichigosama. option 1: love is unconditional, relationships are not. Grant Gudmundson
option 1: write how you feel with the person you're with.
prompt 1
prompt 3.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • stepbystep
    June 11

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    i love your creative side
    it lets me see how you think
    and i especially love your clumsy side
    it's so cute and besides no one is perfect\

    --yeeheeeheee! as i was reading this, my heart kept pounding and pounding and...

    WOW. Great work! (:

    Thanks for entering and best of luck!


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    February 19
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    hmmm. this is nice.


  • in silver script
    December 29, 2008

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    I like it. There's a few little errors and such, but nothing major. I really love this though, especially the line "toasty like a marshmallow"...made me smile :-) Great job!


  • MYsecondchance
    December 13, 2008
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    a very good love poem!
    thank for entering


  • Sorrow is the name
    November 21, 2008

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    VEry Good

    Very Very Well Done With This Write
    I Really Liked It Through Out The Whole Thing

    Thank You And Good Luckh


  • City-of-Angels
    November 15, 2008

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    Cute poem Reminds me of a first love sort of thing. The title reminded me of this song :
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ym0x3vTw6yc

    Cute write, Thanks for entering this. Oh and sorry I'm just now reading it lol, busy week.


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    Please read the rules.

    I’m sorry but “no punctuation” is against the rules of this contest.
    “marshmellow” = marshmallow” If you have something that would
    fit the rules of this contest, please fill free to enter it.


  • Baisi
    September 27, 2008
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    This is really beautiful...


  • unanswered
    May 31, 2008

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    OK so I didnt have much time to really comment before but I wanted to say that who ever this was written for is really lucky. Love isnt a feeling but more an action and the way you describe you emotions show just that. The devotion is apparent. Thanks again for entering and good muck in the contest.


  • unanswered
    May 28, 2008
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    thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Chocoholic156
    May 8, 2008

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    This entry has many metaphors, which I like, and has a nice rythm to it. But this line:
    you're so caring, loving, compassionate, sensitive, mature, and you make me feel so right
    You could skip lines to make it flow more. That line just doesn't work.
    Thank you for entering in my contest.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    April 17, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie

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