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Evening Romance

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The evening was warm and soft breezes blew
the table was set, a dinner for two,
the candles threw out deep shadows of grey
  across pastel walls, like children at play.

The fragrance of jasmine that floats on the air
I turn at a sound, see you standing there,
embraced in your arms, our first sensual kiss,
  a droplet of time, a splash of pure bliss.

The meal is unhurried we set our own pace,
the flicker of flames that soften your face,
the stress of the day, now melts like the wax,
a time to unwind, it's the time to relax.

We both feel replete, contented and fine,
our glasses are filled, the last of the wine,
now fingertips touch with faces aglow
  in each secret smile intentions on show.

Plates on the table are left where they lay
  candles still flicker, the end of the day.
 
 
 

 

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  • Surprise Poet silver member
    August 25
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    Yep, breathtakingly beautiful is right...Thanks... And congratulations on awards...I'll read on,


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 22
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    The trophies above don't surprise me one bit. This is breathtakingly beautiful poetry. Love, Lane

  • Frozentearz gold member
    August 22

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    Frist of all congratulations on all your awards I can see why this poem won so many very nicely written.
    I felt the bliss held within it.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz

  • HonorablyFallen gold member
    July 17

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    I don't normally go for this type of poetry but since coming back to AP about a month ago I have gained a love for it, perhaps because it is so different form mine . BUt for what ever reason I do love this poem .. _Sarahlynn ( will be reading more, thanks for sharing)


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 21

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    Excellent

    We both feel replete, contented and fine,
    our glasses are filled, the last of the wine,
    now fingertips touch with faces aglow
    in each secret smile intentions on show.

    Plates on the table are left where they lay
    candles still flicker, the end of the day.

    Great ending to this verse
    Very soft rhyme sceam

    Well done

    Rick


  • Sprite silver member
    June 17

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    We dance on the terrace, my arms around your shoulders. Bliss is this evening with candlelight and you. I just want to wrap myself with you...Mmmm.

    These are a few of things that I thought after reading this lovely and romantic poem. I loved the flow and the gentle glide through the evening to those "intentions on show."

    Very nice write. ~ Joyce


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 13
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    Awards well deserved for this write - great form, flow, rhythm and rhyme.

  • libithina
    May 26

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    Another piece of deliciousness Sue ..
    I am so there .. under the 'flicker of flames'
    this was 'a splash of pure bliss'
    Beautifully written

  • bluesquirrel silver member
    May 6

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    Hmm- all about that loving time that makes all the trials and tribulations of everyday life bearable- and beautifully written


  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    May 3
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    Romantic indeed! Great rhyme and rhythm. Thanks for entering...it's almost a sonnet, isn't it?

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 29

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    Congratulations on a continuing row of trophies. Make a separate shelf for them.

  • micol gold member
    April 28
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    Yes. A perfect blend of tone and atmosphere. Definitely a winning not-a-sonnet. Congratulations.

  • rainwalker gold member
    April 27

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    This is lovely. There is a slow very romantic tone that you carry all the way through. Excellent flow and rhythm carried me all the way through to a beautiful ending. Also loved the sprinkling of alliteration every few lines, very subtle and always pleasing to the ear. Thank you for sharing this piece!

    -Laura

  • whispernthedark gold member
    April 26

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    Such a romantic write, made me wish my hubby was home! Wonderful poem, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck

    ♥
    whisper
  • kendhal22 gold member
    April 24

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    wow !

    this is such a beautiful poem and it felt a sonnet worthy. My fav. lines:the stress of the day, now melts like the wax,
    a time to unwind, it's the time to relax
    U have away with wds. Kendhal22


  • Elle Kaye
    April 21

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    I think i may have commented on this already, but i have to again! i love this poem so much, Fantastically written. Such a worthy winner.

  • hopelessfidelity
    April 21

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    unforgettable

    i loved the lines:
    "now fingertips touch with faces aglow
    in each secret smile intentions on show."
    this poem shows the perfect elegant evening i've always dreamed of told in a way i can understand and love.

  • Lotus-Mama silver member
    April 21

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    This is absolutely beautiful! My two favorite parts would have to be:

    "embraced in your arms, our first sensual kiss,
    a droplet of time, a splash of pure bliss."

    "now fingertips touch with faces aglow
    in each secret smile intentions on show."

    You definately have a gift. The romance and want you express so well- makes the reader yearn for it too, an evening so perfect. Bravo!!!

    . Rewarded 8


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    April 21

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    I adore the romance of this write..you have created such a beautiful table and set the tone for what im sure would be the perfect evening...sighs...
    Beautiful gold ..
    Many blessings
    ~A~

    . Rewarded 4

  • Amanda 88
    April 21

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    Lovely, Wonderful,Great and Amazing

    This poem was the best poem that I have read in a good while. I loved the way this poem was written, I loved how it talked about true love and how you savor ever moment. This was your best poem!! Keep up the great work!!!!! Remember that True Love only comes once. Great job again!

    . Rewarded 6


  • OrangeMarmalade silver member
    April 21

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    Lovely!

    You deserved the wins! I like how you really bring it home how it takes something really important for us to slow down and savor the moment, like true love.
    Good job!

    . Rewarded 4


  • micol gold member
    April 20

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    Beautifully and elegantly stated in a nicely matched rhythm-and-rhyme structure. Each stanza moves toward the couplet, simply and surely, but with a lilt in the meter that seems to increase the pace as we move through the poem...again, toward the couplet.


  • Sandal
    April 20

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    This is something that I should do more often.
    I like your poem very much, it has good description of a lovely atmosphere and soft feeling. The meter and rhyme are pleasing, and I see that congratulations are in order for success in competition. Hurrah!

  • ian sawicki silver member
    April 17
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  • ecrivain01 silver member
    April 17

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    My Lord ...

    with all those comments from your cheering section, there's absolutely nothing I could say that hasn't already been said.

    At least this is rather more positive than many I've been reading lately.

    Congrats on the trophies.


  • Laura Lamarca
    April 15

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    Content here is nice, gentle and with some good verbiage choices. My only suggestion would be to either use a consistent 10 or 11 count for the syllables...the rhythm was a bit hit-and-miss for me at times because of the change of count.

    Congrats on the amount of applause this piece has received and thank you for entering.


    La x
  • lienluc
    April 15
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    i tink ur poem is deadly

  • perfectsunset
    April 14

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    This was a beautiful love poem. Your imagery was lovely, and this was very romantic as you described.
    Thanks for entering & best of luck
  • mindpoet
    April 14
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    Very romantic candlelight poem

  • Swan song gold member
    April 12

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    This is just a lovely sonnet form line one all the way to the end. A wonderful treasure to read and experience

  • cjenkins
    April 11
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    This poem was good.

  • Bleep7
    April 11
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    Love the verse the stress of the day melts like the wax! Congratulations on the gold.


  • Elfin silver member
    April 11

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    This is beautiful Sue. I just have a problem with line 6, I feel that there is one too many syllables on it. To my mind it should read "stood there" What do you think? Good luck in the contest. Val
  • ian sawicki silver member
    April 11

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    a good poem penend with a flair that is not often seen in the halls of allpoetry, so mcuh so that it is never seen.

  • DolphinLass silver member
    April 10

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    wow what a fabulous well written emotion filled poem..i agree it's a great write...i wish it was mine...well done my friend


  • shylopuppy
    April 10

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    Nice poem, it's really... *doesn't know word for it* It's great. the fonts a little hard to read though curse my bad eyesight... lol Good job
  • perfect-10
    April 10
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    You do not know me, but I know you, I wish you would give this to Jeff

  • LoveToLaugh07
    April 10

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    I can just imagine this. Wonderfully written. I love the way you worded everything. It paints a romantic scene. Beautiful!

  • rufina caraid silver member
    April 10

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    This beats fish and chips on a Friday night! A well planned evening that, being left to one's own imagination. turned out perfectly. the first kiss - delicious, the meal - delicious - I'll stop right here.  I enjoyed reading this and allowing the readers imagination to wander off on it's own adds that little 'wow' factor.   Beautifully penned Sue.   ~Von~

  • PeterGrimley
    April 10
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    I hope my wife has a candle-lit dinner just like this waiting for me, brilliant poetry.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 10

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    Lovely poem you have penned for the contest - great gold and silver winners too. Liked the flow, rhythm, rhyme and sentiments expressed in these lines.


  • The Poetic Angel gold member
    April 10
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    Butiful and Romantic ...

    your choice of words are pure bliss

    x cheeky x


  • Gypsie Ink silver member
    April 10

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    Charming!

    It flows like a river off the tongue. Sweet and romantic. I really like "a droplet of time, a splash of pure bliss." Memories for later to savor.


  • sweet angel rose
    April 10

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    What a truly beautiful and romantic evening for two, I wish it was me.
    Good luck
    ~Rose~

  • FrenchSuzette
    April 10

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    Formidable!
    Je taime

  • King Jeff of Rhyme
    April 10

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    What a beautiful poem, sheer artistry from a very fine poet, You have never written a better love poem.


  • unsigned gold member
    April 10

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    Stunning write my bandit friend...

    I was scrolling looking for more...you could take this into a very sensual write, bit I likethe way you left it tothe imagination..

    Great write poet...


    Simon


  • forgotten Emo
    April 10
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    great

    I loved it it was really great!


  • Laura-
    April 10

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    A lovely poem! I really enjoyed the similie use throughout, my favourite:

    the candles threw out deep shadows of grey
    across pastel walls like children at play.

    Like tehzeeb I think you deserved the gold in both competitions, but congratulations anyway for the trophies!

    Love Laura x

    . Rewarded 6


  • tehzeeb
    April 10
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    idk how you got a silver i thought that deserved both gold awards.
    i love the picture by the way


  • Sacred Ground
    April 10

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    This is beautiful and sensual. I can see my fiance' and myself sitting down to this! Great job
    Congratulations onb the silver, by the way,
    ~S~G~

    . Rewarded 4


  • XUnfaithfulXBeautyX
    April 10
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    I love this poem!!1
    my favorite lines are

  • Lady Altheia
    April 10

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    This is beautiful and gorgeous. I see it is in many contests. Congrats on your gold trophy. Best of luck to you in your future writes.

  • quantumsurveyor
    April 10

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    The downbeat final couplet actually intensifies the emotional content of this piece. The story is beautifully captured.

  • poetgypsie silver member
    April 10

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    I have a certain longing for feeling that way beautiful stanza and form but just like poe all I've loved I loved alone. Thanks for shareing
    happy reading
    @}~~`~Nicole

  • Dalaney gold member
    April 9
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    your rhyme is nothing short
    of brilliant. Love, Lane


  • C.Thunderstruck
    April 9
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    Nice poem. gives me memories. thank you


  • HesMyLuv-MyBestBudd
    April 9

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    Great

    This poem is amazing, most of the featured poems r way 2 long so I just dont read them there for write a commetn but this 1 is perfect length!!It really is an amazing poem the ryhming is perfect, it makes perfect sense. If u sway 2 some of it 2 it means u've got a good poem. Its amazing, u have great potential...keep writing this is great and wonderful!!

    . Rewarded 6

  • Chan101
    April 9
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    i love this poem it reminds me of me n my love one when we set down and talk about our passion
  • Dee23
    April 9
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    dee23

    sorry my comment should have read a perfect night and a perfect poem Sorry about that.
  • Dee23
    April 9
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    dee23

    a perfect poem and it sems like a perfect poem. I live the gentleness of this poem A good write.


  • Cotton Kandy Love
    April 9

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    this poem was very beautiful, i loved it. It had such emotion and it was just perfect =D
    • Chan101
      April 9
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      Chan 101

      hey dis your girl Chan i so loved your poem as well thans love yo to the fullest
  • lil-miss-tash
    April 9

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    Wow this is such a beautiful write and comes from the heart with such emotions and the wording flows so well together. keep on writting. i cant wait to read many more of your poems. from tash


  • Lonewolf2008 gold member
    April 8

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    such a sweet pleasant write, soft with feelings of love, as the evening unfolds. that is my kind of evening, some soft wine, relaxing and the glow of a wonderful meal, at Hilton, Mandalay Bay- 64th floor, Caesars delicious, Belogio, ahh how nice to share the beautiful end of a sweet day together. very nice.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    April 8

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    A beautiful description of a perfect evening. You have a way with words the brings the scene to life. The gold trophy was clearly well deserved.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Brooklynn-X-Tainted gold member
    April 8

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    The meal is unhurried we set our own pace,
    the flicker of flames that soften your face,
    the stress of the day, now melts like the wax,
    a time to unwind, it's the time to relax.

    oooo i like this part its good keep up the writing and good luck in the convo

  • outthereWaterford
    April 8

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    Wonderful imagery it makes one in despair think its truly worth trying for, thank you excellantly writte
  • Eusebius
    April 8

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    bravo

    Oh, most, most romantical, indeed!! Lovely poem with some excellent meter throughout! loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...

    . Rewarded 4

  • lovely V.S.
    April 8
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    great

    this is an amazing poem and i love romantic poems.

  • NeonRose silver member
    April 8
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    lovely rhyme scheme and content. Well done,poet.

  • Musafir
    April 8

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    very good love poem with excellent rhyming.
    Best wishes and good luck,
  • josie-may
    April 8
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    So cool

    This is a very romantic poem its so sweet i loved
    it!!!!


  • craftyangel43
    April 8
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    Very beautiful read....Thank you for sharing it. Good luck in the contest.


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    April 8

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    This was so beautiful and romantic, and sensual on top of it all.. The image that you created was amazing so beautifully sensual.. I really enjoyed this , it was such a smooth read.. Thank you for sharing..
    Great write
    Peace to you,
    Jetleena

  • frownsnfreckles
    April 8

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    Images of the perfect evening. The ambience is soft and warm, the emotions tender and controlled, the intimacy secret and shared. The perfect ending is merely hinted at and expressed so simply
    'plates on the table are left where they lay'
    Subtle, sensual and full of promiseas a true romance should be. Congratulations, a well deserved gold

    . Rewarded 6


  • Lily otv
    April 7

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    A very romantic scene is played out here. This feels like a very special occasion though it could and should happen spontaniously on any evening where love is in the hearts of those sharing it together. Good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 7

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    How absolutely beautiful Sue! What a romantic write this is... just the way a romantic dinner should be.. the perfect night out in my books... I felt swept away by the romance and sensuality of this!!


  • iiwuvyouxoxo
    April 6
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    amazing

    so so so amazing i can see it as if it was on tv.


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    April 6

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    This is an excellent composition--versed to rhyming perfection---Favorite Stanza is:

    "The fragrance of jasmine that floats on the air
    I turn at a sound, and see you standing there,