You're hard work, but you're worth it.
You're slightly worn, not quite perfect.
But you are my perfect, ideal man,
That's why I'm here and haven't ran.
We have hard times, you make me insane.
But, at least our lives aren't plain.
We both bitch a lot. An awful lot.
Both our tempers are pretty hot.
But our irritants are born from our affection.
We just have to live with our inflictions.
All I know is, I love you and need you.
I just have to stop trying to read you.
I'm annoying, I drive you insane.
But, my goodness, don't you complain.
I'm a bit weird and I like things my way.
But 'cos you love me, here you stay.
I make you laugh, smile and scream,
But you always say I'm the girl of your dreams
The good times far out-weigh the bad,
You'll just have to accept I'm a little bit mad.
I guess we'll never fully understand each other,
No matter how close we are as passionate lovers.
Although I may not completly 'get you'
I know that through it all, I'll have you.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 9 Feelings - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended September 7, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing
This was nothing short of beautiful my friend word for word it flowed perfect and also gave a lot of truth about relationships, no matter how hard we try to figure a person out there is always something more we need to learn, -
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thanks very much. Unfortunatley, my husband who I wrote this for has since split up with me - I guess it wasn't that good at defining 'us'! never mind!
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Thank you for your entry in out contest. An interesting poem but we felt the rhyme scheme a little poor. You have 'you' and 'you' as a rhyme and affection and infliction as another rhyme. The flow could also be tightened up a little with a bit more thought. It was however a good little poem.
Good luck at judging time
Sue and Jeff
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This is great
This is an honest breakdown of a relationship. Nicely done!
~Jillybean128
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This is a great testimony to your commitment to your husband. I hope he knows how lucky he is.
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thanks for the read and comment. unfortunatley, I think there's no hope for our marriage anymore, he realised what he had to late.
thanks for the comment though!
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You have written the ideal poem for couples, I know you have described my husband and I in every sense of an expression and word!!!!! Perfectly written, I wouldn't change a thing
Thank you for commenting on my contest poem and congratulating me. Although we have differences in opinion, its nice to know that both of us are respectful of each others morals AND not to mention... KICK ASS WRITERS! lol
God Bless
Sara Dawn 
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This is a beautiful write my friend from start to finish a great read to wake and read first thing in the morning.
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Such an honest appraisal of a relationship. Rather than all the lovey dovey slush that some write, this was refreshing to read. Nicely written.
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Thank you very much for your comment!
I wouldn't say my marriage is hard work, yet we have to work hard at it sometimes! But, the downs make the ups more delicious LOL
Thanks again
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