The horse and buffalo would have no chance
As saber teeth sliced through the tender throat,
Your stocky frame some hunts would not enhance,
For smaller prey would have their chance to gloat.
From the woodlands to savannas you were known,
Your Hyoid bone has told us you could roar,
But when the ice age finished you had flown
To oblivion, not some distant shore.
In a sad changing world where all must end,
How long I wonder, our allotted time?
So many things are hard to comprehend,
So many species cut off in their prime.
Ah! Smilodon fatalis you are gone,
Perhaps too little brain and too much brawn.
A contest entry
- Quickie; Picture Inspired by Nevel by Nevel.
525 points, ended April 5, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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I had to reread this after the first time. The only thing I noticed about this was the flow. A little too edgy, but I cannot complain when this poem really appeals to me! I love the topic, even if it is picture inspired. I think the use of the latin name is perfect ~ very creative and like jcat stated: "pure genious". I like the last two lines. It adds a little humor, but an interesting thought nonetheless.
Thanks for your entry. Good luck!
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Love your last line and your use of his latin name was pure genious!!! Very well done and best of luck in the contest..
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Wow! I can clearly see why this won a golden cup. Your imagery is awesome and goes so well with the pic. Good luck in the contest.
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An excellent poem. I remember when my son was young and so enthralled with cats...all cats, so I learned a bit about the saber-toothed tiger then. Your poem is a lovely tribute to a lost species. Congrats on the Gold.
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Thought provoking
How much is our alloted time?
Congratulations Di on the Gold.
Jim
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A wonderful write here!
I love this picture that you found.
Well done and good luck to you in
this contest! Congratulations to
you on your gold trophy! Keep it up!
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An excellent portrayal, and a well constructed verse. Congratulations on your Gold.
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WOW, I'm really exciting about your poem! Your perception and knowledge about this animals is profound and impressive! By writing a sonnet you have stolen my heart! Although the lines aren't into iambic pentameter, the volta is clearly visible, and I like you use of words very much! I see you have written an English sonnet, with an excellent (and funny) couplet!Many thanks for your entree!
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WONDERFUL!!!!!
WOW! I love this one!
's Just the way you descriptions bring him alive to us.
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Interesting historic lesson of the pre-historic kind here. I'm amazed at the plithera of well rounded general knowledge possessed by this author! And I must agree with BB down there infact and totally including the couplet comment.Nice work Poetess!
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This is really a very accomplished piece of poetry and your concluding couplet is perfect--excellent work.
Bill
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sisss you done it again incredible just incredible your sonnets rock and rollllllll i loved how u pictured it awesomee good lucks lovely sis of mine
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