Her days of sleeping have long passed
Now she walks the halls of my mind eternally
She stops at each painting along the corridors
She reaches to touch my pained face
The image seems familiar to her in a way
As her finger falls away, her memory fails
Next frame, I am facing away
Again, she touches the back of my fading head
I stir in my restless sleep and breathe rapidly
She stops and remembers a song
From long ago, like a distant echo in time
A smile appears on her face as I stop breathing
A portrait of a man appears
She moves her face closer, looking into his eyes
Suddenly I waken in bed, gasping for breath
She never sleeps
© Copyrights G. Jones 2008
Author notes
Prompt: She never sleeps
In a list
A contest entry
- Just another contest by Randomly Beautiful.
1000 points, ended April 7, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Through the echoes of time we are touched by those who have touched us... sometimes a chill, sometimes a cold sweat, but always near...
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Great piece. Thanks for the entry.
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Gar....I like this for the haunted
feeling it leaves me with...and to
use the title as the last line -
it has such impact! I wish you
well, my friend, in the contest...
this is superb. Love, Lane
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Really Gar all I can say is..."WOW!" This piece is truly haunting with thar ethereal touch that I just love so much!
It echoes with the ageless question…is it the dreamer that manifests the dream or the dream that reveals the dreamer?
Ovations!
Marianne
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Is it that she's pulling you to the other side, or are you pulling her here? As always, your work is beautiful, rich in imagery, and very much admired. I disagree with the eerie comment, though! How about the much cliched "hauntingly beautiful"...?
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This is very eerie. I can sense the spectre as she haunts your dreams.When you write "I stop breathing" it is like you are experiencing sleep apnea. That's why you awake gasping! Great take on the word prompt! IN the rules, she states no photos. Better take that pic away! You don't really need it. Your words are very strong and create strong imagery!
Best wishes in this contest!
Shana
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Ah yes ... but those who do not sleep ...
no not stir those who DO. Work that one out, will you?
Interesting write.
Blessed be.
Myra
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