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sometimes

sometimes
when sadness threatens
my joy
I remember
to look up
instead
of looking down
cause
when I see
our endless sky
those
cotton clouds
are
gentle angels
floating
those
cool blue hues
envelop me
while
mother earth
blows kisses
upon my teary cheeks
reminding me
I'm loved

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  • JustBreathe gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    "sometimes
    when sadness threatens
    my joy
    I remember
    to look up
    instead
    of looking down"

    Such wise words here. It's so important to remember to reach for our higher power when circumstances make us falter. Because no matter what is going on around us, there is always One who loves us unconditionally. And that is who gives us the strength to go on ... and helps us find the joy that was momentarily obscured.


    • simpliciti
      June 3, 2008
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      Thanxxx

      for your supportive comments. You've certainly gotten and passed on, the message here. All the best!

  • Bob Fox
    May 27, 2008

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    Now

    Now my lady this is a beauty of a write. One that speaks of sadness turning into happiness. words of a true poet. Happy penning

    • simpliciti
      May 27, 2008
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      thank you and

      I forgot about this poem! I was inspired to write for this contest, so thanx for reminding me...and thanxxx so much for your supportive comments...I enjoyed it...peace


  • Robin Candor
    May 19, 2008

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    The opening of this sets the stage for the rest of the write. "Sometimes when sadness threatens", like an approaching storm. Then you deliver the best of all that can be from that point on. The last line sums it up while not giving up on the possibility of sadness and disappointment. Picture your reader in an aisle at the drugstore looking for something to cheer up a soul who is down and read this again. Would you make your purchase and move to the check out? I would. RC


    • simpliciti
      May 27, 2008
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      wow...thank you

      wow...thank u so much for your supportive comments! glad u enjoyed and I'll take your advice! peace


  • abuyi
    April 14, 2008
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    beautiful work.. real good imagery and very inspirational


  • stargazer91
    April 4, 2008
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    Great job! I like this one. Good luck in the contest!

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