In dreary dark, my anguish finds
brief solace from the light
With vacant eyes I look behind
past haunting wearied sight
My heartache burns a gaping hole
denying what the Reaper stole
My heartache burns
My heartache burns
Flames searing my immortal soul
In dreary dark, my anguish finds
an empty, wanton blight
Embraced by stone destruction grinds
my heart’s internal plight
My sadness reigns in misted haze
bereft, bedraggled memory frays
My sadness reigns
My sadness reigns
Escaping to forgotten days
In dreary dark, my anguish finds
tears dieing in the night
Like clockwork metal cogging winds
to the hour of our fight
Those words, my last - mire stark regret
grieving thoughts yearning to forget
Those words, my last
Those words, my last
“I hate you!” screams a heavy debt
Author notes
Prompt: For the one you miss...; Trijan Refrain
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A contest entry
- Contest for rhyming poems ( prewrites allowed... without medals) by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended April 23, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the one you miss.... by Burnt-Angel.
700 points, ended May 5, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PW Party by Blooming Poet.
425 points, ended July 23, 185 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Guaranteed Comments! II by Nam.
1750 points, ended June 8, 122 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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This is beautiful and so amazing to me that you took a cliche topic and made it different and not cliche. Loved it
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excellent poem...
Best wishes and good luck
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This is absolutely splendid. I am so glad I found it and was able to read and enjoy a format that is new to me.
Only one little hitch for me and that is the flow of the following line: grieving thoughts yearning to forget -
I feel I want to make this read: grieving thoughts yearn to forget. But that's just my thought. Excellent. Bravo and good luck.
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Excellent
What a great use of this form. So well crafted and expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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Oh my this is just brilliant! I love the form, new to me but a stunning form
You imagery is quite specatcular and the sadness really comes through.
Beautiful flow and word usage!
All the best with this.
Love it!
Gaylene
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Now this is some fabulous poem. I love this form. Where can I find it? or did someone on the site invent it? Your meter is perfect; imagery makes me feel sad, metaphors are also great! IN my opinion, when writing in form, it tends to bring out the emotion of the verse. This rhyme is not at all forced. You are my son of AP and my mentor!
Love Mom XOXO
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Breath taking brilliance tunes my mind in the depths of loss.
Lyrical tragedy where a heart weeps.
Your words bind in such creativity
Hugs Auntie
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