The room moved
as he took a piece of something
no one had ever seen
waking voices
from their usual design
he steals intention
releasing a taste of arrogance
through the smoke filled eve
certain ~
he'll be embraced
by his choice of desire.
He scans the crowd
for the perfect companion
his breath lingering
in shades of me
yet I turn
from this Casanova
not willing to play the hand he leads
and the room still moves
when he approaches
but this time
he's wearing blue...
Author notes
Title inspired
A contest entry
- Just another contest by Randomly Beautiful.
1000 points, ended April 7, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great piece. Thank you for the entry.
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i always like a great ending
in poetry...one that leaves me
wondering and wishing for more.
You have certainly done this
here. I wish you well in the
contest
Love, Lane
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I am left speechless with this one, mom.
Just... wow.
You portray such a... intriguing and unforgetting character... and you go into such depth and end it off with a twist.. almost like the whole pom (excluding the ending) will now be in another effect since he has a change of color.
Man oh man. I am stunned.
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This was a very mysterious poem. Left me wondering what wa sgoing on.
the ending was wow and then I thought now what is going to happen. I enjoy a poem that stops as your did. The reader wonders now what. Great take on the title.
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Wow great write
You said that sometimes you write differently and this was different to what I had read before...
It has a haunting, sensual tension to it that I like, the promise of something more...interesting...almost needs the Mans view, maybe, if you let me I would like to write a riposte for you one day...a collaboration maybe (when my skills are more tuned)...
you loving husband...
Simon
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