And in the dusky hours,
before the moon rose,
He kneeled, and gently kissed each closed eye.
Smelling the scent of her hair,
Lavender silk resting on ebony shoulders.
Whispering quietly to a silent ear,
He bid her goodbye,
and a pleasant journey,
On the conveyance of Angel's wings,
She had found her release at long last.
The Cancer was thorough,
Ghastly mission performed,
But life and love, in spite of it all,
had won.
Safe journey dear,
when you arrive,
Keep the porch light on,
For soon, I shall follow.
And we shall play once again,
Under heavenly moons, and the banyan trees.
Author notes
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W. B. Burkholder
A contest entry
- ~♥~ Hopeless Romantics and Other Sad Love Poems ~♥~ by Shassidy.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Prompt by aboomer.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Romantic and sad story of a true love, very gentle, very sweet. Congrats on the bronze.
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How lovely! Beautiful wording: sad yet romantic, full of grief yet full of deep love.
Great images, wording and emotion in this. Read nicely.
thank you for such a nice entry
best wishes
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Immensely beautiful and loving this reaches the heart softly
Best of luck in the contest
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Very nice write, one that is filled with emotional romantic impact. Loved the last 8 lines, very powerful. The message is all that matters here. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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choked up in the throes of sorrow; I can see no reason
for your lack of attempt at meter. How long has there been a porch outside the gates of heaven?
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meter schmeeter...
there has always been one, the porch that is, none of us are expected to stand in the street
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Unless you were...
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"Keep the porch light on, for soon I shall follow" is a poignant farewell to a lover. I thought your formatting was a little choppy and detracted from the pace of this poem. Otherwise it was tender and well written. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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I'm going to echo the others and say this one is sad, yet beautiful. The idea of separation by death being only temporary is one I love to think about. Great write.
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Thanks very much for commenting on tha Banyan trees much appreciated
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a tender celebration in good-bye
You have taken the sadness of parting and left me with only the beauty of meeting again. Richard Bach wrote that we know friends and loved ones, be it moments or life times...that goodbyes are necessary in order to say hello again. You capture the evergreen circle of love--"heavenly moons, and the banyan trees' warmth, happiness...yes the ever green.
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I saw my first banyan trees in Hawaii on the Big Island last July. This is a sad, yet very beautiful piece, and your descriptions of the scene paint the image perfectly in my mind.
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This is a great piece! I really enjoyed the wonderful imagery in it, it's very powerful. The title reflects the poem very well and it also is inventive, so great job with that! It's a very touching story in poem form and I really like that. The last stanza is really powerful and connects with the title, so that is my favorite part of the poem. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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This is delicate with lovely imagery. What a sad scene, but you draw hope in the end. I'm puzzled by "silent ear" - always so, isn't it?
Best of luck!
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Yes I guess your right, just trying to paint that picture
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