Chestnut muscle,
shakes his mane,
sheltering travlers,
from the rain.
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This is awful and will be deleted at the end of the comp. Pleased do not comment it is just drivel...
A contest entry
- yet another quickie.. by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 3, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Whatever you like...
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Ummmmm Sorry. Cant resist commenting. Do you know you are a poet par excellence
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You cannot take this off!!! This was really good. What you may think is nothing but "drivel" is really good to others..So I think that you should leave it.
I really liked this brother..
Jetleena
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Sorry, I had to comment... I loved the description quite well actually. I would not delete it. I would revise it and add on to it. Very beautiful!
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This made me smile wide ~ so cute and immensely clever indeed!... x Thanks for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Love and eternal light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Very cute. It could be part of a nursery rhyme.
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Oh what a clever take on that pic.
Well done and best of luck to you in the contest.
Delila
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Well...the rhyming is a little forced for me! But otherwise the image that u are trying to create is quite beautiful!!
pri
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Hello.
Thank you for your comment on my piece "Painted Snapshot." You are very thoughtful.
Your contest submission is quite the read. Besides focusing on something deeper, you look at the more simple things. With these things, though, you create something just as raw and powerful. I admire this fully. I also like the rhyming in this. It adds more beat to the poem.
Good luck in the contest.
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Nice rhyme here. Not in the least bit contrived. AND you went for a specific detail. Marvelously done. Love that back ground by the way. I WANT IT. *laughs*
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lol. now there is one
heyyyyy thats horrible to say
and i like this
it's ncie and simple.
great write and good luck! -
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