the feeling is gone,
and yet it was never really there.
gentle sounds of a false memory.
oh, please do not falter my conception
for I am comfortably detached.
so pleasantly miserable in this loveless world.
remove this excessive noise from my space,
it's distressing my slumber.
turn off the lights please.
A contest entry
- ~♥~ Hopeless Romantics and Other Sad Love Poems ~♥~ by Shassidy.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 67 entries
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the feeling is gone,
and yet it was never really there.
I love the oxymoron of this line
hmmm then it breathes apathy and cynicism on the rest.
Thank you for sharing this
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wow!
this is really sad
it was a painful write, but written beautifully! keep penning!
AWESOME!
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A sad and beautiful poem. This has such an informal, conversational tone. I relate to this write! Well done.
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this just makes me want to fall asleep and never wake up again.
ever one can realate and the words are beautifuly used.
that is why this is a great write.
LOVED IT,
KNIGHT TIME
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the feeling is gone,
and yet it was never really there
....so pleasantly miserable in this loveless world.
And still the creativity proceeds! Very deep
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oh, please do not falter my conception
for I am comfortably detached.
I love this, I know the feeling.
Great write.
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wow, this is really good. i even know what you mean for i've had this happen before, i still wonder though if he ever got the hint, but anywho, this is very good. keep writing!
nicole
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thanks
I ve only been writing for a couple of months, so I greatly appreciate youre kind words.
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Wow, I can really feel the emotion here, even though the words are quite vague when it comes to clear direction. I like it! Thats a tactic I haven't quite mastered yet. Awesome job!
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Awwww supposed to think you were in and out off love again...Well..."and yet it was never really there"....
This poem speaks of sadness as I read it, sometimes feelings can't be explained...sometimes you wanna believe something is there that isn't...
Hope the next time the feelings will be real,
just as mine are....
I loved it,
XXJeannette
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Excellent.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Delila
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i feel you! nice job...
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This is a great poem! It is really short, but it has such an amazing word choice and such great phrases that it packs a lot of emotion into it. I love the title because it is original and reflects the poem well. I also love how this has such a cynical tone to it and still keeps its meaning really well. The tone reminds me of the type of lyrics that bands such as Fall Out Boy, Paramore, The Academy Is..., and other Fueled By Ramen bands have. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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very intriguing, great language and nice flow.
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I like this!
I said quite a lot with out giving it all away at once
great write!
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