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I Am

I think therefore I am

I see therefore I am seen

I know therefore I am known

I speak therefore I am heard

I do therefore I move forward

I act therefore I belong

I pretend therefore I am empty

I am not myself therefore I do not exist

I disappear therefore I was never here at all

Author notes

1) Cogito ergo sum (I think therefore I am)

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  • brightXdarkness
    April 8, 2008

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    hm.... at first I thought that this poem was very cliche, but then as I continued on reading, I read these lines that caught my attention:

    "I pretend therefore I am empty
    I m not myself therefore I do not exist
    I disappear therefore I was never here at all"

    Those lines really helped to bring this poem to life. Also the repetitiveness of the beginning of each line may either be a great thing or a bad thing depending on how you look at it. Keep writing, and good luck in this contest!!

    Alex


  • spiritualangel
    April 8, 2008

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    I think, poetry is a way to scrachdown feelings and the meaning of every part
    lays beneath the surface of poem and so to read eachpart a few times, would get to
    the meaning. works and does for readers.

    Moreover, some readers are more interested in the sentiments a poem expresses,
    some in the way those sentiments are expressed, and others in the conjunction of the two.

    You beautifully weaved your inner mind waves, as neutral.


  • Embossed
    April 4, 2008
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    This poem just forced an approving "huh." from me. Nicely written!