Dear Webster, I read your definition of love today. This is what you told me: "strong affection for another arising out of kinship or personal ties..." No offense sir, but I'm not sure you know what you're talking about.
Is that all that love is?
If that's not it, what is?
What is this feeling I feel arise?
Affection from personal ties?
This definition is only the start.
It may describe the mind, but not the heart.
Love can't be so simply defined.
Words can't explain hearts entwined.
When someone else brings you joy by their presence,
When you think she is beauty's essence,
When she lights the world around you,
and she makes your heart pound too...
When you can be brought to tears by purity,
and your feelings make thoughts surety,
When your limbs grow weak at the sight,
and your heart longs for her at night...
When you realize that "strong affection"
are words that need strong correction,
give this one more inspection,
re-define this after some introspection.
After you have felt love inside, then I think you'll find that love has no wordly definition. When it happens, then you'll know: that only she is love defined.
What did you think
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HA! i'd never read the definition before, and now i have it brings a thought that i've always suspected, outer doctrine really sucks! he he, then again don't think i'd have remembered everything i know now without them, still your poem is beautiful and soo true, w introspection the crux of it, for what love does a tibetan monk have sitting alone upon a mountains peak? what makes destiny spiral and spiral and link co-incidence w co-incidence and find the same light eons of multiverses old deep within anothers eyes? the truth is no-one knows, yet it happens and so us poets titter and frolick upon the edge not really caring and so, knowing everything....
anyhighs well written dear poet,
w chai and a amethyst crystal,
-JAS
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I "love" (am I using that word correctly?) the theme and concept of this poem very much...to challenge the textbook definition of love. But I think it would be better served by a poem that does not rhyme (go with free verse) and is more visceral, more concrete in images and examples. Sure, love is 'purity', but it is also animalistic desire. The idea of this poem has so many possibilities, but needs to be more careful in avoiding the cliches. And don't abandon the line/stanza integrity at the finish.
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wow! such a strong and emontional poem! I loved it!
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