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talking with a bitter lonely man(winter comes)

The long chill of winter
accompanied by short days
settles into my mind for a visit.

Its bitter bite gnaws
and crawls from extremities
to old wounds and new depression.
Its silence- deafening.

Contorter of faces and places
it does not abide a direct gaze,
rather, it prefers sidelong glances,
hesitation and nervous steps.
It cares naught for schedules.

 

Midnight strolls in day-like light,

daytime chores a burden.

Life is slower, muted, restrained.

there is no solace in its solstice.

 

My brow furls under my fortieth winter.

I ponder my existence, and with little resistance

I pray for forty more. 

Author notes

this is what came to me when i saw the contest. i leave it up to you to decide if it is excellent or at least very good poetry. I could not think of a title so used one that sounds like "walking in a winter wonderland"...peace

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  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 7, 2008

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    for as the long nights of Winter closes in, the days grow shorter and depression sets in...as one sits with himself and does ponder will it ever end yet longing quietly for yet another:f

    very good...thank you for sharing:f


  • catz Moderators member
    April 29, 2008

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    I feel this way sometimes, now that I'm in the winter of my life... only I'm praying for seventy one... and for many more to come. I can especially relate to the third and fourth stanzas, though I do find solace in each new day.

    I like this whole piece, Terry. It gives off both comforting and unsure vibes for me. Damn, getting old is the pits sometimes... but it sure beats the alternative


    Dee


    • Ogreatbaldone gold member
      April 29, 2008

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      71! wow. i will be happy to make it that long.
      glad you liked this Dee...peace


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    April 21, 2008
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    Me too - please 40 more.

    I liked this piece. You have nice internal rhyme and soft alliteration throughout this piece. Makes for a smooth and good feel when reading.

    Title hmmm. Perhaps "Sidelong Glances"

    Just a thought.


    I enjoyed this very much. Great take on the prompt. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • blue-eyedbabe
    April 4, 2008
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    hmmm.......excellent!

    i vote for excellent!!!!! i like the play on the title, very clever...i pray you get 60 more!!!


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    April 3, 2008
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    nineteen lines is tough, even if you are not rhyming...thanks for the challenge...peace

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