We used to tiptoe through poetry,
holding hands,
and sigh at the pages.
I picked petals to slip in my pocket
to savor for later
like hidden treasures,
hanging on to your words
like stars I had caught
whispered
within a glimmering moment,
but emotions got in the way
and now there is something green,
but not the grass, for it is dying here.
Where is the flutter in your syllables
you left like feathers for me to find
as invitation to dance
in rhythm with your heart,
for all I see is gray
with wildflowers growing
through a crack in the sidewalk
as I search for metaphor in a dandelion.
♥
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I am poet2angels (Lynda)
Hi Amaranthine Lover !
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A contest entry
- Pay It Forward Picture Prompts by Randomly Beautiful.
500 points, ended April 7, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nicely written piece. I truly enjoyed it. There are a few lines that stuck out for me. I can honestly see and feel your words....
"but emotions got in the way
and now there is something green,
but not the grass, for it is dying here."
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I’m not shore if I’m reading this write, but it seemed that you where talking about a poem, and I don’t think you broke topic, so this was a poem you read , and wore enjoying until it went bad and something was sad that got you, or this was a person.. I like it but I’m thinking I’m missing it...
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this is really beautiful my friend. I love your imagery. But I hate to be the bad party here, but I have to ask you to enter something else that hasn't already won gold. It's not fair to the others, but knowing you, you got a ton of awesome pieces. Pretty please? -
very excellent poem with mellow sadness and faith all combined.
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So beautiful... I had to come back and pick petals with you. Dandelions always return, you know...
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Congratulations on the gold! I can definitely see why as this piece is simply stunning.. beautiful, yet sad emotions flows into the heart of the reader
Outstanding piece of poetry Lynda!!
Jazzy
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I love the way you think and the way this makes me think as I read through such well thought out lines here. This is one of the most pleasant and few writes that I have actually felt quite honored by the pleasure and opportunity of reading online. You are a true inspiration! Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
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what a beautiful and encouraging comment! TY so much!!!
I will be by to read some of your work when I get home tonight. It has been much too long
TY for the smile
Lynda
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Løvetann
By the subtleties some perceive only in journey, I believe I just dipped my toes into infinite space, merely to sample the shivers you’ve spun in this lotus of stars. It’s truly amazing the wonders you’ve weaved into this, Lynda, allowing a fool to tap into a beauty that so rarely sings itself into being, I might not have the eyes of a poet, nor do I travel by the cosmic touch of one’s fingers, but at least there are some to grant me a glimpse into such a rare blessing. Reading this was like breathing life into tapestry. Or not, what do I know?
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You are so kind. I adore your poetry so a comment like this from you is praise I cherish! TY for such kind words
When I see anything posted by you I rush to it like being drawn to a magnet...I need to have a contest soon and invite you. I also plab to host a contest using one of your poems for inspiration....
TY
Lynda
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i am glad i found this, some poetry reaches for answers this gives a deeper thought and a question, to linger and fascinate, long after the page has been turned...PK
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Beautiful...
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Aw the tenacity of dandelions...they bloom sunshine in concrete cracks and we call them weeds, but they are treasure to a child.
How we look for the flutter in the invitation to dance in the rythms of heart, the stars caught in whispered glimmers (exquisite softness here)...
I got misty reading this, and wonder how many times I didn't see the dance in a dandelion.
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What a wonderful comment ...TY for making me smile....I appreciate your thoughtful words and understanding of my poem
Lynda
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just another poem from you that expresses the delicate nature of your soul and the strength of your precious muse. well done dear cousin, and best wishes for the contest.
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Ty CUz you are the best
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Oh. that last line is super-duper wonderful! I'm extremely jealous.
(and I know how you feel!)
Wonderful!
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WOW Thanks!!! My dearest that is such a compliment....
There is no smiley for handstands
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"hanging on to your words
like stars I had caught
whispered
within a glimmering moment"
Yes, my Friend. I hear the echo of a song I once knew, so fine, so soothing. It seemed to linger forever, in a dream...then negative energies, gossip & fickle people crept in, trying to destroy this fortress of flowers we've built. Well, I've known their kind before. They will throw bricks at your garden as you try to cultivate beauty. I will NOT stop planting seeds. Nor will you. Good luck in Trina's contest, Sweetie. Wanda
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you deserve the biggest hugs!
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Congratulations, Sweetie.
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the truth and poetic device shine in this
as I read it was like an open book, that I had read before
perhaps an old standard
as poets we do see much more into things...
including people and their emotions
I love the way you think
and the way it makes me think
peace and hugs
Muddy
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ty for understanding this
and for your lovely comment
Lynda
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This is such an incredible piece my dearest!!! In all honesty, the emotion here is untamed and exquisite in its delicate state - ever surging with a certain fury.
Excellent use of imagery to ponder, the revelry of days; moments, fragments, whispers - of all that used to mean so much... The sadness here is bearing witness to such heart break, watching the beauty once cherished - simply fade into the gray.
Excellent piece! A new favorite for so many reasons... I loved this!!!
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TY Sis for your constant support and love
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I love the opening for it embraces the entire panopoly of love and its way of turning life into a celebration. The description of emotions, perhaps we try to hard, or we think we feel too much and become afraid of being overwhelmed, who knows. I liked but didn't like the way the poem became gray in those two verses. The use of the dandlion is very good for in its desintigration are also the seeds for another life. beautiful Love, Tom B.
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well, Tom this poem is about how I see AP right now, and to me, most of the time these days, there are some gray parts. It isn't really about love ...It is about how I use to feel coming here to feel the feathers of others flowing and catching them ...It was about poetry and not drama......But in my eyes, many days I come here now to calm down , relax and write, and I get bombarded with drama and have had friends tell me the same thing happens to them of late so to me, this is a sad thing, so I expressed that with gray as a metaphor...and the green grass and flowers are gone and only a few wildflowers coming through the sidewalk....just metaphors to express how I am feeling lately....
I dont like feeling this way but it is just that way for myself and some others I am told I do appreciate you
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Lynda,
With one word I can describe this poem. EXCELLENT! Keep the ink flowing in this manner! Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Oh my dear sis this is one of the best I have seen from you ... it just warms as I read.
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awwwww, you are the best Bro on the planet biggest hugs for you
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Outstanding!! A journey of what was and now is wrapped in poetic grace. (I agree with born4freedom about poetic abuse.) Your poems sighs with pressed petals of memories As always a pleasure to read your heart across this page my dear friend
I wish you all the best in the contest
Jazzy
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you know you are the best...but I will tell you anyway and often
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words other than excellent would be a waste of time
So
Excellent
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You are so uplifting and such a wonderful person and friend thank you
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My Dear Friend,
First all, I must say, this brought some vivid memories to mind as I was reading...
I love the images that caressed my mind as I was reading!! What a beautiful read this one is!!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
Nyetta
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TY for all you do and I hope you never change
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just little ole me, and i am who i am and that is just me
No, don't worry, I have been like this for the past 40+ years
don't think I will change now
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This is awesome!
I love the way that you put this together.
Beautiful imagery and creativity flow in
every line here. Wonderful work as always
my friend and good luck to you with it here!
Jeremy0826
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TY for being such a wonderful friend always
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