A star lit sky gleams softly down to earth,
The lustrous path awaits my one true love.
I wait, alone, upon the grassy turf,
The only thing I see, a single dove.
The bravest soul that no-one can defeat,
When I’m in pain, or sad, you help me cope.
The kindest person anyone could meet,
But this is just a dream, my single hope.
Your charming eyes, a pearly white and brown,
When I see you my fear is washed away.
Your soothing voice that never seems too down,
A love so deep that it will always stay.
But when I call, you never seem to hear,
My desperate voice that always brings a tear.
Author notes
'Doctor doctor I'm suffering from the illness of Luv'
By DawnKestrel
A sonnet that should paint feeling of love and sadness.
A contest entry
- POETRY MONTH! by WesBreezyxxx.
300 points, ended April 21, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ages 14 and under: YOUR MASTER POEM! by Sky Prince Ireland.
300 points, ended April 12, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sonnet Contest for 17 & under by Miss Chievous.
472 points, ended April 15, 2008, 8 entries
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600 points, ended April 28, 2008, 55 entries
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400 points, ended May 22, 2008, 12 entries
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850 points, ended May 8, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ♥♥♥♥Lovesick or Sick of Love?♥♥♥♥ by Sorath.
600 points, ended April 21, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - So you're a poet huh? {{{PREWRITES WELCOME}}} TAKE 2 by Melissa Burns.
500 points, ended April 18, 2008, 17 entries
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300 points, ended May 5, 2008, 14 entries
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600 points, ended September 10, 2008, 195 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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not feeling it
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Bit of a contradiction, but that is love. Congrats on your trophies so far.
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the whole poem seems to contradict itself..you extol the dove's virtues but at the end say it is never there for you. It is that, that I do not understand.
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A sadly apt poem that catches the truth of humankind in love - or even in luv! Rather nicely done.
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Nicely done. good luck with the many contests you've entered. It's worth what trophies you've gotten so far. Hope to see more added to it over time.
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Great rhythm here, nice imagery.
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your author notes cracked me up
I like the poem too. I usually start with author notes to help me understand.
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GOOD LUCK!!!!! I LOVED THIS POEM
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COOL
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very full of love...great write!
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Thank you for your entry into my little contest, hope you have a bit of luck with all your efforts!
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Aww this is beautiful!! I love the subtle rhyme as you read it! Thanks for the entry!
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Congrats on the silver!
A great piece, begins so happy then turns to sorrow. Very well penned. Good luck in the contest
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Hey there,
Thank you for being the first to enter this new contest of mine. I loved your poem and how you **painted** with your words!
All the best in this contest and also a very big congratulations for the silver trophy!
Becks
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Finalist
Very sad and heart felt write. I think you penned a very good piece here. -
I could see it all!!!
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Well imaged and everything. This poem kind of brought a tear to my eye as well. Thanks for entering.
Good luck.
Brian -
NICE
I LIKED YOUR POEM AND THE IMAGE TOO -
wow, this is beautiful.
i just want to keep reading it over and over,
it has such a great rhythm. wow.
amazing write!
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