Damask caves of inner destruction
Threaten to collapse around me
Crushing my serpent-poisoned heart.
Like a forgotten war of heart and sword
Like hot crimson geysers your words,
Rip it apart bleeding out onto your words
Your wicked words.
Like a lamb to the slaughter
You devour me with your indifference
Your cruellest misdemeanour
Now my wicked words spew
Venom encapsulates every word
Your lies lead me to this place.
Your tendrils still taunt from afar
Your deceit grasping at my heart
Your razor-blade words hurt
Your way of punishing me for living
A pity to me, you don’t care you’re killing me.
Author notes
Eith My Chemical Romance or Murderdolls or 36 Crazyfists for this one I think
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Very nice flow and construction. Powerful dark imagery gives the piece a nice edge. Excellent use of vocabulary and it kept me entertained. Thanks for the read.
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Good
dont have much time, so ill just say I like it
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wow some serious imagery. great poem and best of luck!
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Wow, this is so deep! It's an amazing poem! This is so detailed and it has great imagery! Well done.
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A very dark write indeed... A lot of passion has gone into this and obviously a lot of pain.
Good luck in the contest.
All the best,
~T.S~
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this is a deep and dark piece which has pain and sadness in your words. know I am always here for you hun
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