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Hidden Road

Lies the children of despair
Down the hidden road
You look down, they aren’t there
May this story be their ode

A story of pain and deceit
A story untold
The day they fell off their feet
The story will unfold

There was a boy named Johnny
He lived all alone
All the time, It was him only
His one wish he could not own

To get away from the broken home
To get off the hidden road
The pain no one ever known
Would help the story unfold

Harmony lived across the street
But she never came out
They both would never meet
She sat at home and pout

She dreamt of the only day
It was her dream
The day she would get away
From her own scream

A story about her grandfather
That disgust us all
A story of a molester
That would make her fall

From the day Jerry came to play
Johnny filled with hope
They became good friends that day
Johnny could finally cope

One day Jerry did not play
Instead Johnny cried
Cause He was in dismay
Since the night Jerry died

A little girl named Emily
Went out to play
She went to see Harmony
Not knowing what to say

Harmony was surprised
To see one at the door
The happiness glowed in her eyes
When she saw the little girl

They walked to the playground
At the end of the road
Spinning on the merry-go-round
But they didn’t know

Stood the mayor of the hidden road
Watched them like a hawk
He looked very old as told
He was frozen like a rock

No one ever knew he was there
Or even know he’s dead
No one even seemed to care
Bugs crawling out his head

Harmony was killed one day
Johnny killed himself
Emily died of old age
Like an untold mystery, sitting on a shelf

The story of a hidden road
You will never really know
Stories of the broken homes
Secrets are better left untold

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  • Jfd
    February 3

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    overall a great poem, I'm very impressed at the skill level and only being 16, the rhyme and flow were a bit choppy, but I think this is very creative, and with a little revision this could be great, thanks for taking the time to enter!


  • Stormy Days
    November 20, 2008
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    OH MY GOD.... THIS IS AWSOME!
    Hiya


  • trekkergirl
    November 6, 2008
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    This is a nice write indeed however, I do not believe that it is what I wanted. I wanted a story told about the other two men that were on the other crosses at the time of Jesus' death. While this is a wonderful tale it does not have anything to do with that.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest. A poem that made for interesting reading, but your rhyme was a little off in places and the flow could be worked on to improve the poem.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue and Jeff


  • Amazon Huntress
    April 22, 2008
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    Spooky tale, very dark.
    Thanks for entering!
    *~Huntress~*


  • JackFellDown
    April 20, 2008

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    Interesting piece, It was a good topic but the story just didnt jump at me. The rhymeing was a little sketchy in some areas. Im glad you did your best. Good luck ~peace


  • Rhapsody
    April 18, 2008
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    interestin


  • jazzerina
    April 15, 2008
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    This is a very thought provoking poem...filled with emotion, which is what i was looking for. one comment that i wanted to make was to watch grammer and tenses...for example:

    The pain no one ever known
    &
    She sat at home and pout

    You probably have your own reasons (maybe for the sole purpose of rhyming) for having it like that...thank you for entering!


  • nobodys-girl
    April 9, 2008

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    this made me shiver! i hate thinking about all the people who suffer and basically are ignored. great write. thankyou so much for entering my contest and goos luck!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 8, 2008

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    Hmmm, this is a very interesting write indeed, I liked the beat to it and the rhyme. I liked stanza 2 the best.

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