Read our letters again,
this time slowly, my replies...
amazed how we so loved a life
that never really existed;
not more than a taste...
like honey on one's tongue.
Author notes
Thirty words plus title, only one adjective "amazed".
A contest entry
- dear......., by Nicolette.
1100 points, ended April 14, 2008, 43 entries
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"amazed how we so loved a life
that never really existed"
Interesting ... love letter to a 'stranger'? I guess this can be like relationships that are formed through letters or IMs. People who have not met, but share their lives and intimacies. Good luck in the contest!
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thank you JB-
for reading and your thoughtful comment, yes the new computer internet age has introduced whole new ways to know people...thank you for taking time, always enjoy your point of view...PK
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i see Nic had you edit before i got here, lol
i don't know what this piece was like before, but i surely do like it now
mostly, because it reminds me so much of situations i've been in before
nice
thanks for entering
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Short, yet misses nothing at all.
But why would someone exchange letters with a stranger?
Hoping for a to be continued
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Thanks, PK...now it falls softly on the ears
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Some letters are indeed like honey on the tongue (or the ears for that matter) - especially when read aloud. I stumbled a little on "not anymore".. i wanted to read "not more than" or "not any more.." - perhaps it was the word "than" that caused my stumble, lol
There's a gentle nostalgia here that many can relate too... especially the "tasting".
Thank you for a lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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This sounds to me like an affair across time (or relitive space). A life created through words, that never truly existed.. never quite grasping or entering the physical world, and remembering that life with happiness.
That is what I got anyway. This is very nicely done. I can never seem to limit myself to so many words (even though a creative writing teacher had challenged me to). I just feel cheated if I cant use all the words that make me relive the subject matter
You on the other hand, breathtaking!
Criss
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