As I pick you up and turn you on
Your features play that familiar song
My hands run over your voluptuous form
Cold to touch, but beneath fingers you warm
Like old lovers we meet in dark
Together we work to create that spark
And within your strings my fingers bleed
Creating that sweet elixir I need
Like the first time, we start off slow
And from our movements, your moans flow
Harmonising, creating a song
Becoming one among the throng
This time together, the minutes grow
The birth of music, we conceive a flow
The amount of boundaries the creation can cross
Singing of life and love and loss
Washing over my body and soul
Changing my life as a whole
the idea of emotion, created and expressed
the concept of a conscience needing to confess
the elixir of life this style can bring
reflecting everyone and everything
a passion deep within us all
and every night I answer your call
like a mistress, fulfilling every desire
taking my needs and lighting my fire
your body and your substance alike
hitting always with that resonant strike
and every time we continue to touch
I know you mean just so much
Your lyrical sword you continue to sheath
I know music is my life, the air I breathe
Author notes
hey guys
this one here is written about my love of music, specifically my bass guitar and the music that flows from it.
i wanted to try and create the imagery of two lovers meeting, and from their passion a new life begins...that is, from my playing, the new love and life my music gives me. music is my life, i am quite convinced i would die without it...so yeah let me know what you think please!
A contest entry
- Prompt Inspired by RainbowGirl257.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a sensual, lovely, almost erotic tribute to one of your greatest loves. I enjoyed immensely the way that you personified the basss guitar...I have a love affair myself with watching people play the guitar. It is an amazing skill. I'm happy that it brings you so much enjoyment.
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WOW! look at this, I leave you alone for afew months, i dont go anywhere near your amazing writing, I come back and i find that its not amazing anymore! to say this is amazing would be an insult, its gone beyond that! Wow girl you are incredibly talented! Wow... and yes, Wow again! Love you heaps babe, and I look forward to reading more of your superb work! Much love xxx
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Amazing
Oh my god I love you this is amazing my friend and about a guitar a girl after my own heart, god what a write I knew form the words strings u meant a guitar awesome
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fantastic poem i love it i play the piano good luck in the contest
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Like old lovers we meet in dark
Together we work to create that spark
And within your strings my fingers bleed
Creating that sweet elixir I need
Like the first time, we start off slow
And from our movements, your moans flow
Harmonising, creating a song
Becoming one among the throng
This time together, the minutes grow
The birth of music, we conceive a flow
The amount of boundaries the creation can cross
Singing of life and love and loss
Alsome Poem you have here sis. Keep up the marvelous work. I use to play an instrument too it was the piano but I stop.. I was thinkin bout goin back to playing it cause I found out later down the road it was summin thing I enjoyed.. but enways Great Job.. wonderful work. enjoyed readin it.. hugs to ya.
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Ohh. So tastefully sensual. Great use of double entendre. Absolutely loved it!
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Good luck and You had better win something with this piece.. If you don't I would say there is something wrong with the world.. -
BEAUTIFUL!!!
I love the Bass.. That is my favorite sound in the world and I have always wanted to learn how to play. I picked up immediately that this was about a guitar and the love for the music that it makes. And believe me I do understand it. Music has always been a very important part of my life, without it I don't think I would still be here. This is wonderful. The structure, the flow. Fantastic! It is creative, and it evokes such wonderful imagery, like that of a skilled painter. Fantabulous! See its so good I had to combine words to express the awesomeness!
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WOW WOW WOW this it bloody amazing... i love it a lot... you must share a very close bond to your bass as do i... wow seriously i cant say a lot except i love it... well done cat in the bag for this i think... good luck in the contest
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