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Budapest at Night






Angeline knew dark people

in places I would never brave -

we explored by night

beneath the sparkling teeth

of this alien place.

Dizzied -

drinks of something clear and earthy

and strange jazz

from a smoky corner -

we stumbled in and out the shadows.

Sirens sliced the rainy sky

outside our flat

and Angeline

practiced foreign phrases

with passing musicians

and a woman across the narrow lane.

I will ever know her

from travel magazines

with grey and gold photographs

of a place and a world

apart.





 

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  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    and you stole my muse too ..... she gets about a bit...

    very nicely done Scott, well thought out as usual and many many thanks for entering this contest

    Gill.x


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    April 3, 2008

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    Is it supposed to be ever or never?
    I would never have thought of using ever, but it works nicely. Just wondered if you intended it

    I love this, the opening line is brilliant.
    It reminds me of the song the sound of silence
    It has the same lyricality and tone..

    Just love it. Sorry I don't have anything useful to say :s

    jess


    • S A Adelmann
      April 3, 2008
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      Oh, and how rude of me: Thanks for stopping in. I'm really glad you liked my piece.

      Scott

    • S A Adelmann
      April 3, 2008
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      Yes, I did intend "ever" - it is a usage that is probably becoming archaic, but I really love the sound of it as opposed to "always" or "forever".


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    "grey and gold photographs
    of a place and a world
    apart."

    A raw, yet inevitably delicate penning, deftly written by a soulful hand, my Friend. Good luck in Gill's contest, Scribe. Wanda

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