The night is young,
I feel no fear,
the moment we’ve awaited
is finally here.
The moon shines
and smiles upon us,
the night is ours.
Don’t speak...Hush
Let us dance beneath the stars
under the pale moonlight,
saviour our solitude
as our passion takes flight.
The night is young,
I feel no fear,
the moment we’ve awaited
is finally here.
I rest my head on your shoulder,
your hands on my waist,
this moment isn’t eternal
there’s no moment we can waste.
Surrounded by darkness
I find safety in your arms,
truth in your eyes,
you’ll protect me from harm.
The night is young,
I feel no fear,
the moment we’ve awaited
is finally here.
The trees won’t tell a soul
our secret is safe,
our bond unbreakable
written by the hands of Fate.
Your head drops down
a tear fills your eye,
you’re becoming mist!
it’s not time to say goodbye!
The night is young,
I feel no fear,
the moment we’ve awaited
is finally here.
Sunrise approaches
and we must depart,
another night will bring us together
for you’ll forever own my heart.
I always loathe this moment
watching you disappear...
I fall to the ground
and my soul remembers Fear.
Author notes
this song was inspired by the song 'Just for Tonight' by Ville Valo and Manna Lindestorm
- Gallery of Poetic Artistry group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Music! by GypsyEyes.
500 points, ended May 24, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Song Inspired. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended May 21, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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First I like to be-late this approval in congratulating on winning this silver trophy...
Really I think you do have a good standard potential in writting songs..
And the song you've suggested is a good song, even though it's new to me.
I hope the best of luck in your future writtings.
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hmm... i really like this one. it's passoiate but not too much. love it.
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This is a great piece, you have penned this well and with passion I can see. Nicely done with this one
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A wonderful song that you've penned here
Your emotions have been penned well
This was terrific -
Great work here
You have penned this very well and such a heart felt piece indeed
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Good Work
Good use of words to express your feelings. You are sure to do well as long as you continue to write... -
Thank you for your lovely entry and song choice, good luck in my contest, Josie
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i like this except for the repetition of "moment" when perhaps something could be substituted to make it flow nicer (ex: the moment isn't eternal/ there's no moment we can waste) it just is to many times , perhaps you could substitute second for moment the 2nd time to make it flow easier? just a thought. otherwise it has a strong lyrical style to it with some nice images. Well done
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i really like the line "the trees won't tell a soul."
this flows beautifully, and i didn't lose interest.
i love the night.
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can i put this in my story im writing
its awesome
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Nice Poem!
It flows Like a river!!!
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wow!
this is cool man - why no comments? im first - yes!
lol
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the i liked it loads man, great for the first you wrote on here,domz
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