I was once a good man who had a good living
Thanksgiving was fun as there was much giving
My refereeing was part of the game
If anyone knew it would be such a shame
It's hard to say what is my worst thought
Maybe it's that I'd someday get caught
I think I will keep on doing what I'm doing
Lying and cheating amidst all the booing
The devil and I made an agreement in hell
If I threw the games he would never tell
It's only that the man above
Knew that I needed a little love
He sent me a woman but I couldn't see
So the next time a man threw a knife at me
I no longer live on earth you see
I'm down in hell the Devil and me
A contest entry
- Rhyming Rumble 1 ( part one of a 3 part series ) by RuthKephart.
525 points, ended April 5, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - If God knew what I knew.... by walkingstick98.
450 points, ended April 28, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very nice..had to read it twice to make sure i got it..but i did and i really enjoyed it. Great job and good luck in the contest
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Just back for another look
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Amazing how the choices we make can come back to haunt us, I think you've brought that point across well in this storyline. I think you need some type of pause in your final line, perhaps:
I'm down in hell - the Devil and me
The flow on several of the lines were off especially:
The devil and I made an agreement in hell
Feel free to make any changes you wish and I'll be back for a reread before judging. Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest
Ruth
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