God help me,
I can't take the pain,
I have nothing to lose,
Nor anything to gain,
please take away the life you lend,
for my broken spirit you cannot mend,
I'm screaming inside,
Yet no one can hear,
And even if they could,
I doubt they would care,
So a drop of blood,
For Those who care,
And for Those who believe,
A silent tear.
Author notes
there has been previous spelling mistakes......sorry!
-Ella
A contest entry
- quicky! anything goes! as always i want your best! by urapns66.
425 points, ended April 2, 2008, 11 entries
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450 points, ended April 11, 2008, 57 entries
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thank you all
thanks everyone for commenting i like to know what people think and what i can emprove on......i would like to be able to write some slightly more happy poetry....but i don't seem to be cabable of such standards......oh well....i'll keep trying......
ella
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it is not a gold poem. good luck next time.
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this message in this poems sound a lot like the poems that i have written in the past Great
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I like the 'silent tear' idea. It was interesting to say the least. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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kool poem.
its short and still gets straight to the point.
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This is so amazing!!!! I love this one I think it's one of your best!!!! keep writing sis your so talented!!!!
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great write and great job!
here is my favorite part!
"So a drop of blood
For Toughs who care
And for Toughs who believe
A silent tear"
loved the emotion!
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