Image Credit: Beautiful Solitude by *Lillyfly06
Rusty fingers stretch
gathering blood-rushed strength
searching for a whispered touch.
Eyes set as glass upon an alien sea;
reflecting and mimicking youth,
changing the guard within its crossing,
knowing pain lingers within joints.
Tears well as fruitful pools
beneath gray sky pillows
hoping clarity gleams
before the rain comes.
Life pillars its strength within the one
drifting out
as sky meets sea
released to ebb and flow
where souls released fly free.
Author notes
Image Prompt:
Beautiful Solitude by *Lillyfly06
http://www.deviantart.com/print/2710738/
A contest entry
- Art Inspiration!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
687 points, ended April 11, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice write Pamela, I like the form it gives the poem a drifting out feeling. Especially,
drifting out
as sky meets sea
released to ebb and flow
gives the poem a wave feel of in and out tides. Good images and descriptions as always. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the HM
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much for your kind words.
~Pamela 
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A very well penned take on the prompt chosen! Weaving a hopeful glance into the thoughts of the image. Nicely done! Thank you so much for your entry!
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Perfectimperfection
Thank you for your kind words and the HM in your contest. I am pleased you enjoyed this piece. ~Pamela
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Beautiful picture
and words to describe same.
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Jim
Thank you. ~Pamela
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stunned isn't really the word i search for, because i expect this from you... but i guess, one time i think i may not be moved by your words... hasn't happened yet though. i felt i was drifting over the scenery, free to fly... one day.. one day.
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going nowhere
Thank you my friend. I am always so pleased to see your comments on my poetry. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Sweet Pamela
This is an atmospheric piece of art in truth and tone.
Eloquent, as is expected of this fine poet.
You, poet, have excellent imagistic control and use it to graduate from pictorial depiction to spiritual definition of souls flying free as the tide "drifts out" into storm.
I like your use of common words in unusual but rewarding settings, such as " Life pillars its strength".
The way you lay out your poem is aesthetically satisfying as well.
The poem progresses by associations of images progressively building to meaning. I love this poem.
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Ron
I thank you so much for your glowing review. I am very pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Eloquently worded. Solid and rich in metaphor. An enjoyable read, with depth.
until exhale,
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grimoire
Thank you so much for your kind words. Very much appreciated. ~Pamela
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You are indeed a wordsmith, language distinguishingly crafted and presented in such a way that one cannot help but take notice and give pause to savor. Allowing each line to draw you in deeper and roll within the mind over and over again. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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♥ Touchof1der
Thank you so much. I am pleased for your comment on this piece and am so glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Oh dear poet, you could move a mountain with
your words. I love it!
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Richard
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Extraordinary words combine here with exquisite
imagery to give a glimpse of deepest reflections.
Reading this imparts of small gift of calm
even to the turbulent seas that have found a
place within me. Blue
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Blue
My friend, thank you so much for your wonderful words on this piece. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. ~Pamela
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