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Fining Enemy Lines

Line-after-line
I see your insidious mind
I'm cloaked
Shrouded in the darkness (evoked)

But I'm wis
Something you can't recognize
(My thoughts disguised)

I'm garnished, going 'gainst the grain
Light infantry with heavy artillery
PUncturing pathetic, poetic pains
No gains
Slain...are simped-out THINKING (veins)

Chalk it up kid
You chugged down a drink, then you hid
Behind AreSun's bid

Did you think it would save you?
(I think you have multiple-personalities too)
I'm like that Shaolin Monk with my head shaved
Stop reaching for me
I already gave
But you're brave
At the poetry slaughter, it was you I saved
But RAVE!...
You've dug your own grave

I elude you 'cause I'm clever as a fox
Then surprise you (like a Jack-in-the-Box)

You're afraid and broke
Something hard to fix
Just hearing my name's gut you dropping bricks...

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I hope you enjoy this new installment to our on-going "Word Warz" by WiseWithWordz.

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  • moluv10
    April 3, 2008
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    You are killing me with this...lol Battle on bro but watch your back..lol


    • AsIThink gold member
      April 5, 2008
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      Thanks a million. But "The Page Inker" is responsible for this piece (lol). Can't take the credit (lol). Maybe I need to pass on this message of yours to him. He was just online (I see) lol.


  • Itahed
    April 3, 2008
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    You Drew Blood!!

    Nice write...


    • AsIThink gold member
      April 5, 2008
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      Ha.Ha.Ha...AND I wrote another piece with it (that blood...lol). Thanks for the compliments.

      Pager Inker.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    ha ha!

    yeah , looks like someone's getting testy! l.o.l. great piece , but stay your toes! I heard a rumor someone 'might' gunning for you! l.o.l.!


    • AsIThink gold member
      April 5, 2008
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      lol...give them my address and keep in touch with me. I would be happy to cancel my important appointments in order not to miss 'surprise guests'. lol...And O' yeah, thanks for the comments (lol).


      Pager Inker

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