the quick slip
the feel of cold steel
the fresh scent of blood
this happens over and over
never doing any good
only leaving the scars
trying to hide it all
but everyone stares
because they all know
cutting to ease the pain
to make everything good agian
yet the pain is still there
so once more you cut
until the pain is gone
and this will always be
making up the mind
to end the life
are you happy now
Author notes
name is Cat and also I do not cut or anything as such and I strongly disbelieve in suicide, its true that I've thought about it...but I'm NOT going to make all my friends suffer because of me...if it wasn't for them..I doubt I'd be here right now....also...I've lost someone this way...
A contest entry
- emo poetry that doesnt suck. by risewiththesmoke.
436 points, ended June 25, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pic Inspired: Goth, Dark Fantasy Writers...Points may Increase! by Ephiphany.
800 points, ended July 18, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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I'm sorry. =/ But this does not get to me, since you yourself have feelings AGAINST it, they are not YOUR feelings. You are just guessing what someone who cuts feels like. =/ I'm sorry, but I love EMOTION that is REAL for the poet. Since I am a cutter, and I am suicidal... this annoys me. But... it was a nice try at something along the lines, even if it bugs me that you did this and it's not from your own feelings.
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I know that I've never actually cut myself...or tryed to kill myself...but I've seriously though about it and picked up scissors and was ready to...and I've thought about suicide more than once...so yes it is true that I've never really done it..but I've been so close...also..I take a lot of my poems from the emontions my friends give to me when they tell me things..I've helped a few of them to change their mind about killing themselves..I know its not the same as me actually doing it to myself...so sorry for that.
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Very creative piece
I think you did a wonderful job on this. Thanks and good luck in the contest.
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thats pretty intense, really good for a noncutter, im impressed XD thanks for entering
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thanks
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Good write. Very descriptive.
Great job and good luck
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thanks!
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it's really good since arn't like this. thankyou so much for enterin my contest and best of luck!
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wow really dark for you don't ya think? lol great write though i liked it a lot! so much emotion and i do agree that cutting is pretty common and over used subject matter but you definitely make it work and are careful to not over sell it which is definitely a good thing. great job as always lol but honestly im not just feeding you shit lol i really do like your stuff!
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Please Read the rules again. Thanks.
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Yes, I'm 100% against it as well. This was a nice write, filled with truth. Thanks & good luck
BabyLove--x
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