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Slave to Insecurity

Hope descends like fading lights
Warmth removed from comforts touch
Lost within emotions grasp
Locked inside my own distrust

Sanity removes itself as
Doubts and fears erupt within
Chaos swiftly filters through
Emotions I did not intend

Caged by insecurities
Enslaved by broken dreams
Rethinking my reality
Or what it used to be

Grasping now what must be done
I stand with sudden confidence
Determination sinking in
Everything makes perfect sense

What speaks to you? What do you feel?

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  • scorpio rising
    April 6, 2008

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    "Caged by insecurities
    Enslaved by broken dreams
    Rethinking my reality
    Or what it used to be"

    This is perfect...absolutely perfect poetry

    Beautiful!!

    I just yeah....those words really speack to me


    I must be honest though...the ending is a little weak...or maybe these lines are just too good

    hahaha...I don't know


    I just know that i really liked this poem

    I see you having been writing like crazy

    It good...you're good...the whole is beautiful


    So happy to have read this


    Keep them comin!


    Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


    • Twilight4Eternity
      April 6, 2008
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      Thanks for your honest opinion. The ending isn't my favorite either, perhaps I will change it. Please feel free to tell me when you don't like something, I like to recieve constructive critisism. Especially since this is one going towards my creative writing project.


  • going nowhere
    April 3, 2008

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    oh my!!!! excellent. many times you write things that i could write myself... all those thoughts and emotions. i really like this one.


  • Rianna Bear
    April 3, 2008

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    I really zoned into your first stanza...by far my favorite one. the wording is perfect, and expresses such a deep seeded sadness of battling one's own struggle for inner peace. it is a hard battle, still one i have yet to conquer myself, but it always helps to get it out like this. i applaud your ability to be so open and willingness to share!!!


    Rianna