Rain of blood
Forever falls
Through dusty clouds
And forsaken hearts.
Forgotten momories
Flit carelessly by,
Bullets take lives
Of those who cry.
A gray mist hazes
The ground beneath,
A tombstone marks
The life lost to
Suicide
One soul lost
From among many.
Friends forever remember,
Hearts beat onward,
Memories fade with time...
The pain is swift in falling
And dreadfully slow in lifting.
Much like the dead man
From a grave, memories
Rise and fall like
Moisture from a tear...
Evaporation...
Precipitation...
Author notes
A Senior from my School; Rest in Peace Zack.
(3-31-2008)
A contest entry
- Give me your best... by Jack22.
600 points, ended April 11, 2008, 22 entries
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Comments
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i love your poetry
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i can relate to this so much
it reminds me of me not so longh ago
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very atmospheric
Beautiful words describing what is obviously a very personnal and tragic experience. It's just as well that memories fade, or could we stand the pain?
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this is so deep and dark and just amazing. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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This is so true of this tragedy we call Suicide. You certainly captured the essence of it perfectly with this wonderful poem. Thank you so much for the entry.
Az -
I reall liked this!
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