The depth of my sorrow reaches to the pit of my soul
It hurt so badly to let our little fairy princess go
A porcelain doll baby in a white satin gown
A small gold cross necklace hanging down
Her tiny little hands lying close to her sides
Fingers curled inward tucking memories inside
A crinkle across her nose like she had a secret to tell
All this and so much more I’ll remember only to well
A slight smile on her lips, natural as could be
Her matching bonnet completed the picture for me
Inside a small coffin only thirty-two inches long
Without baby Chloe, how do we ever move along
A couple of stuffed animals to keep her company
A gold princess ring from her papaw and me
A mass of tiny rose buds for the coffin display
Baby roses put inside the lid looked so gay
I kissed her button nose when I said my last good-bye
Promised to bring Easter flowers when springtime was nigh
Then her daddy insisted no one do it but him
He gathered his courage though his face was grim
Picking up baby Chloe, he carried her out
The greatest gift of love, I have not a doubt
He said he had done all he could for her
No other was loved like our darling baby girl
Took her to the site where her resting place would be
Her mommy hung a wind chime in the nearest small tree
Back in our cars, on the road once again
Almost more than anyone could comprehend
The little girl we wanted with all of our heart
So suddenly from our arms she had to depart
It’s not fair, but who do you blame
Our lives will never be the same>/b>
3/31/08
Author notes
Chloe is my granddaughter. She was born 2/22/08 and died 3/28/08 from SIDS. She was 5 weeks old.
I wrote this poem the day after her funeral so I wouldn't forget a single detail. I wanted to remember her just as she was and I was scared that over the years the details would slip from my mind. You may not think this is my best effort but trust me when I say, it's my most emotional piece ever done.
This BG was custom made by "The Madman"
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A contest entry
- For Anyone on My Favorites by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended May 10, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Want Your Best! by JackFellDown.
550 points, ended April 20, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best, New or Old by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended April 26, 2008, 39 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry =] [p/w allowed] by LeilaJayne.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Break My Heart by XkatsuneX.
350 points, ended June 16, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - laura's 50th-gold-trophy celebration by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended July 4, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me what wins gold around here by AutumnGypsy.
550 points, ended August 28, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 'Top Billing' Poet to my Page - 2nd Annual Contest - Prompt Anything by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended August 30, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended September 23, 2008, 56 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Cry by DemonicChanel420.
700 points, ended October 28, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lots of Options!!!!! by HeavensNewestAngel.
700 points, ended December 17, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your most personal & meaningful poem from ( 2008 ) by justgot2loveme.
1500 points, ended December 11, 2008, 52 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotion! by Brilliant Blonde22.
470 points, ended December 19, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking for favorites of my favorites by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended February 9, 38 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a sad story. I'm sorry about Chloe. I think the poem needs more imagery and the background makes it hard to read. I had to highlight the poem to read it because the background is so distracting. Overall, this was good. Because of the story. Thank you for entering my contest.
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All those trophies you have won just says it all..speechless.Thank You for entering, and for expressing such sensentive emtional thoughts and good luck
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What a visual, no words cannot match what anyone would say, heartfelt, beyond beautiful. Excellent. BLessings.
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Definitely an intense piece. Thanks for bringing this earnestness to my contest.
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Oh my gosh...this tugged at my heart and opened the fountain from my eyes. I think this is the best one you have written...so powerful, you had me right there with you and your family. I don't think I can read anymore of these right now...this one really really touched me. My love and prayers to you Cathy!!
Sam
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A Beautiful Tribute
Hi Cathy--A beautiful Tribute to Chloe who is sadly missed by all but abides in the arms of God.
This composition is well-deserving of all the awards it has received.
Congratulations on the Silver !
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I'm sure ...
this is a good poem, but I can't read it. The font against that background is impossible for me to decipher.
Thanks for entering anyway. -
GAH.
I don't know how to comment on this phenomenal piece. You've poured out your heart and soul, and for that I commend you. I appreciate your Chloe poems so, so much. Thanks for entering my contest. It's a pleasure to read your work!
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This write has brought tears to my eyes. My heart reaches out to you. No one should ever have to lose a child. She's with god now and forever in your heart. Many hugs to you. Best wishes in the contest.
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What a heart-wrenching poem this was.
I am so sorry.
My sister lost her baby when she was just a few hours old, years and years ago, and she still cries for Monique to this day.
This was wonderful.
Thank-you for sharing it.
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Thank you for following the rules of my humble contest - much appreciated.
Obviously, based on the number of trophies this has won, you are well aware of your talents and the beauty of this piece.
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It was soo touching! I'm so sorry about her! Thats so sad, I even shed a tear for the baby girl I didnt know! Thanks for the write!
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I cried through the whole poem
My heart hurts so much for your loss.
I am so sorry.
Your poem is truly very beautiful, just like the Angel you wrote it for.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Justgot2loveme
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THis is a great poem you wrote. Sorry to hear about the passing of your granddaughter. THis is a lovely tribute you wrote on her behalf. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
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Cathy, what can I say, I'm at a loss. I know deep inside me that I read this poem before, and can't believe that I woudl have read and not commented, but just, in tiny slight case that I didn't comment...
this is heartbreaking. i dont have anything else to say, or that i could say .. just heartbreaking ... it's one that will stay in my mind for a long time to come i think. i particularly like how you managed to make this both one of the saddest things i've ever read - and, at the same tiem, one of the most noble also. no bitterness, just true heartbreak...
no words, cathy, no words to empathise enough.
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congratulations on all your trophies. such pain is hard, I know. It does help to write about it I think and if we can turn the venting into beauty there is some satisfaction. Thank you for entering.
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This is beautifully written, I am very sorry for your loss. I can't imagine what that must be like. Best of luck in the contest, and my best wishes to you.
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I am very sorry for your loss even though you have probably heard that a thousand times before. I wonder though why did you put your trophy toll in the title? It makes it seem like gloating but when put with such a sad poem its just upsetting. This is wonderfully writen. I wonder why is it that the good parents who want children lose them and those who do not are the ones who have children they don't want? It just seems wrong. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I am very sorry for your grief. You wrote a wonderful poem here expressing your grief and your use of imagery here is very touching. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. I can definitely see how it won so many trophies. They are all well deserved.
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A touching tribute and I am so sorry for your pain!
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Ohhh how touching! It must have been so hard to cope with Chloe's loss. The deep pain and sorrow is greatly felt in this poem. I thoroughly sensed the sincerity and anguish by which this poem was written.
Very well written and amazing rhyme. Good Job and Good Luck. Thanks for your entry!
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This is very dear to me...my niece, Abby, died this past march. She was born in January of this year. It was almost as if you were describing her funeral. Lovely and heartbreaking all at once.
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This brought tears to my eyes. On wednesday this week, I found out my sister lost her baby. She was in the 2nd trimester. That too was difficult, but I'm sure in comparable to the this... holding an angel for such a short time, would be extremely difficult.
You've penned so many feelings into this and has touched the very core of me. -- I'm not sure if you are religious or not, but I'll say it, cause I feel it:
God give his blessing to you and your family. I pray for your heart to heal.
Thanks so much for entering the contest, it was a welcome pleasure to read and review your work.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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This tugged at my heartstrings like nothing I have read, it takes someone who has lost a child to understand the pain a family the goes though. Brought me to tears, still is. I detest in this case sayinn welcome to the finalist list but you are there. Best to you and your family
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speechless... this was beautiful, i loved it, sooo sad. I loved this, wonderful write, thank you for entering my contest, and good luck, Keep up the good work and stay strong! -
this is too heartbreaking and personal for me to comment. thank you for your entry - so sorry for your loss!
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omg im actually crying...that was so sad. It must have been so hard. Not only the loss but writing about it. So emotional and heartfelt plus it was beautifuly written. I loved it GREAT JOB!
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this was very well writen a very wonderful peice of art thanks for entering
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I am very sorry for your loss (I know, that sounds so cliche, but I really mean it) Thank you for sharing this with me.
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Your words here expressiong your love for your grandchild and in memory of her too is both beautiful and heart breaking
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It made me remember how, at a time like that, those small details imprint themselves on one's mind. I found the most moving parts were the baby's dad carrying her out and her mother hanging wind chimes on the nearest tree.
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this is a very sad poem it will be considered great write though.
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I knew yours need tweaking, but raw emotion deserves a reward.
I am sorry for your loss, and believe me when i say there are better things ahead of you. -
i'm not feeling the fourth line. perhaps a better word than Surrounds. other than that i can feel this. I have lost alot of friends recently. and both of my grandmothers. so i know deeply how it feels to look into a coffin with some one you love so much inside.
I can tell it hurt to see her, and to know you'd never get to play with her or smile with her. or see her succeed. I know.
And i see it here. all over this poem.
Its a good piece, its full of emotion.
However there are errors. There are rhymes that could be tweaked to add more of an impact, there is a rhyme gap for a moment.
There a sentences that could be better phrased.
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That is really sad, it is a great vent of feelings. I see you've caught yourself in a vent of feelings, and you described her very well. It is sad. Good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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This poem held my eyes glued to the screen, for the description was so well - I could almost see her. What happened to this precious little angel?? I wish you the best in life, and with all your contests ahead!
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Beautiful and very sad poem about a heartwrenching but important event. May God comfort you and you family in your deep loss.
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really good....it is so beautiful. i can see your daughter's face looking down from Heaven.
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I feel your pain and second it honey, it's really horrible when someone can tear you apart like this, but you have survived that's one step towards being alive.
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Thanks very much for entering this into my contest, and congratulations on your trophy. Absolutely love this =] xx
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Hun, I do not even know what to say to this one...it is so deeply moving and so personal...sad and emotionally felt...I send my love and Blessings to you all...may you find peace again...
thank you for dharing your love and your pain.
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so sad!
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wow....this was terribly heartbreaking and I'm very sorry for your loss, I don't know what I'd do if one of my cousins died...babies are so precious to me.
Very well written though.
Kass
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Congrats on your bronze award on this work of art. A poem rich with love and loss of one so young and precious. Wishing you and your family all the best,
Evan
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Well sweetheart, I'm so sorry for your loss, and it's such a fresh one. We have talked about the kids, I had no idea the baby passed. I have lost a baby before, so I know this heartache too well. Your loving words have sent this angel to heaven swaddled in love. I wish your family the best in this hard time.
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whisper
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Cathy this is so moving
Heart felt sorrow beautifully expressed
She was a china doll in my eyes too
Love you Sis
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Wow. Just, Wow. Amazing. i really felt that. Very emotional.
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wow this is so sad
i am so sorry for your loss
god bless you
and your husband
your heart wrote each line
my heaRT FELT YOUR PAIN
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Wow, I can see why you definently gave a piece of your soul to write this. I appreciate you entering it. It was griping. I loved this line
"The little girl we wanted with all of our heart" which makes it even sadder when I think of those people who treat their children like a burden. Its well written and the background with pic adds another dimension to it. I really liked it.
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Wow, this was a deeply emotional and beautiful, touching poem. It made me want to just cry my eyes out. It's so sad to lose a loved one, but even more sad to lose a newborn baby. They have their whole lives ahead of them and so much to live for, so we all wonder why? Why does God take ones so young? I guess we just have to believe that God has better plans for them up above, although we will miss them greatly. Sorry for your loss.
This was beautifully written & I am glad you entered it in my contest. best of luck
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What a beautiful, beautiful write. So much pain and love blending together, as only a poem for a lost one can hold, yet so wonderfully done.
There is so much in life that we don't understand, one of the biggest ones to me is why babies have to die.
Beautiful and powerful, this is a wonderful poem.
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Hood-Winked!
This is such a special poem, and it must have been extremely difficult to put pen to paper, and I am so glad you did
I find it amazing that this lovely poem was penned from such a tragic loss, I think the sweet memories you have of Chloe, will bring you much needed comfort...
You have added gentle rhyme and created a picture of a beautiful little girl that the reader can hold in their minds, and as hard as this was to write, you have penned your love for her, from the depths of your heart, she is always going to be close by
Much love ~Lilac
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Hood-Winked!
I am in tears as I read this heartfelt and so full of love poem. I am so sorry for your loss, there is nothing I can say or do to make it better I wish I could. Chloe is smiling down from heaven and watching over all of you. I could never imagine the pain of losing a child so I can't say I know the pain that you have but I have lost a brother and father and I do know the pain of a loss and it is such a great weight to bear. I am here if you ever need to just talk. My prayers and thoughts are with you all. I know this was such a hard poem for you to write it is so beautiful and amazing such a wonderful tribute to your little princess Chloe
Theresa
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HOODWINKED !!!
Your loss and your grief touches my heart and I grieve with you. To lose one so small and precious is a burden our hearts carry, thinking of what could have been. My our gracious God comfort and strengthen you in the days, weeks, months and years ahead. You are in my prayers my friend.
This poem even written through tears is very good, in structure, rythym and rhyme.Well Done!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis (Gray Elk)
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I have no words only a fountain of tears.....My sorrow burns deep in my soul. I am so sorry for your loss....
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Oh This Is Precious
Oh this is such a precious tribute to a beautiful little baby girl so loved and adored. What love and beauty in this precious bundle you all shared. The poem has such beautiful rhyme and rhythm and flow it was just so touching. The emotions ran deep for me as I read this precious piece. The last two sentences I can so relate too hun,
So succenly from our arms she had to depart
It's not fair, but who do you blame
Our lives will never be the same
Thank you for sharing with me
So TRUE!!
Much love
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Such a beautiful tribute to a precious gift. Though her time was short she will live forever in your hearts. My heart and prayers go out to you all.
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Even under the sad circumstances it is good to hear from you and know that you are ... well enough to write and post. I want you to know that you have been on my mind, you and your family as well as so many others here. You are not alone.
This was... flawless hon. Everything was just... perfectly place and very well written. Love you. Take care. -
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i am so sorry for your loss- this is such an amazing tribute to your angel, who obviously was so well loved in her short time here.
May God Bless you and yours.
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oh cathy, this is just about the saddest thing I've ever read of yours. I'm teary eyed right now. This was a wonderful tribute my friend to your beautiful gradnchild.
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Oh, Cathy...This is the FIRST time I have
cried since coming to this site. I don't
know what to say. I just send my love to
you and your family. I know God has Chloe
Lane in his arms right now.
Lane
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What a beautiful tribue to Chloe Cathy. Deeply touched by what you've written. I hope with time that your tomorrow's become brighter, love always - Di
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Oh Cathy - I feel your pain through your words they are so.. beautiful. No words I can say ~ will take your pain away. Love is the greatest gift with can give to anyone and baby Chloe was showered with this ~ be strong my friend ~ we love you.
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I was brought to tears with this one Mom. This is a beautiful tribute. I love you all.
Crystal
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A very heart rendering expression you have made for Chloe. It truly touches so deeply. I pray that you find some peace in this time of sorrow. Thank you sharing with us, Cathy.
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A beautiful tribute for little Chloe, very nicely done Cathy.
John
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