with two lids closed
i lurk in still
reticence
to hear repose in
quietus sleep-
Author notes
free-write on my own "silence"
A contest entry
- what happens in the white spaces by Dienush.
750 points, ended April 30, 2008, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Yeah, Diana is right. very concise and envelopes nicely
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excellent write. Very peaceful. Congratulations on the Bronze.
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Wow, I love the simplicity of this. It is one moment, one image painted so nicely and easily in your words... Great choice of title too. In fact, I saw another poem by you in some random contest and recognized your style, even though this poem is the only other thing I've read from you. You seem to have a very strong style and I like that. I'm left wondering if you really need "with two" in the first line. Otherwise, I love how cute this is
Thank you for your entry.
~Diana
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