Early spring shines brightly
glimmering carefully on to the world I face
Misty clouds above my head
Poisoned raindrops,
dripping like acid on my skin
hurting me…
Mud on my feet as I walk on,
I am sinking…
into this putrefied puddle
And as the darkness falls…
with one look I realise,
there is nothing left of the fragrance,
the beauty once shown…
Nothing left of the smell I loved so much
Emptiness around…
A few remains…
Call’s of nature are showing me
this is a battle I can’t win
A duel I have to face…
No fight strong enough to win…
Author notes
Wolf Mistress into a Duel with DeathDolly and to make this better the prompt is a Duel too...
A contest entry
- A Duel of Poets (1) Invite only! by Beating.
450 points, ended April 12, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A fight I have to face....as a duel I can't win...
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like the Sun that break through the clouds the rays that retract the Poisoned Rain having greener grass beneath your feet walking bare footed so this battle 2gether we can win...my frien
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Thnxs my friend
, some battles you just need someone to fight together with you and I am glad you're with me in this one
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front to back is what a FRIEND is for
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Hey sorry I didn't message you or anything.
Nice poem, I can tell you love the environment very much. Not many people are like that anymore.
Good luck :]]
♥;; DeathDolly
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Very Good!
Um... You grasped the concept of this contest better then I. Now that I realized through your poem I could be in big trouble. hahahahaha.... Great writing my friend.
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Nothing says Spring like a roadside full of trash.
Confused by the author comments, but then again, I'm easily confuzzled.
I'll read this as symbol and metaphor to mean a hopeless situation that at first promised (or pretended) to be positive.
The first couple lines begin optimistic enough, but then the theme sets in...
Of course it could also be disenchantment with the way we destroy the plant.
So you are in a one-on-one competition? Send me a link to your opposition and I'll write a mean comment, lol. I'm kidding, I'm way too nice.
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