A bulbous bougainvillea
marooned;
in thought and
moral
creeping
up,
stealthily
unchecked...
SHOCK
of color
in pristine white;
It:
cries
a sorry crack
crumbling
through
the entangled vines,
wrought
of mortar and
weary bricks;
A sightless heap
witnessing own death...
Author notes
The view outside my bedroom window.... nothing like it, for getting things into a perspective!!!
ps: The poem is about the wall. It's abstract so might require a few reads before the meaning is clear
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Comments
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I like this.
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Wow lol, what a view. You've certainly stretched your mind in this ingenious write! This is a great line
'SHOCK
of color
in pristine white;'
although it's a little hard to picture exactly where you're coming from here. A great entry.
Peace Georgia
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reminiscent of ee cummings? lol except u use punctuation.. idk i like it but i'm a little confused about what this is about like i love the lines.. "SHOCK/of color/ in pristine white;" like i love pristine that's an awesome word..
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I think i forgot to put it in the abstract category, but the whole point is that you ought to read the author's notes. They are there for a reason
Anyway, its not so much the wall but the fact that something of 'relative' beauty can also have 'rude and dirty' origins.
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