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What You Mean To Me

 

Words can not express, this love experienced by few

How you make me feel; as though

A light surrounded by a bright aura

Turned on in my heart

 

 

Years have gone by

One by one…so

Unchanged are my feelings for you

 

Many more years will follow them

Every single moment in time

A personal panorama

Never to be forsaken

 

Through bad times, long forgot

Of course the good times too

 

Memories we cherish; they cannot fathom

Everlasting, forevermore

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Shadow acrostic - first and last letters of each line spell out "what you mean to me". This is the first time I tried this, it was harder then it looks!

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Comments

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  • RadioPJ
    May 24, 2008

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    Soft and smooth, the sentiments of soul. Excellent acrostic -- unique even. I wouldn't have caught it, too wrapped in the emotions shared to notice that detail (both beginning and end!) Very nice.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    Another fab shadow acrostic!!!!

    This is beautiful poem of soft feelings and love... sigh... oh to feel like that!


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    April 25, 2008

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    You are darn good with this Shadow acrostic. You have inspired me to try this...

    I love the pick, I love the poem! AND I ENVY THE FEELING!!!


  • jcat gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    How fantastic is this??? I have no doubt in my mind that this was incredibly hard!!! But the outcome was just stunning!!! Another fabulous write by you and another form that I may have to dare...


  • james119
    April 12, 2008

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    well done !

    this is the first time I have seen an acrostic using both first and last letters of each line
    you handled it well

    two tiny nits:
    Of course the good times to (too)
    Words can not comprehend, ( I have a little trouble with the word "comprehend" here. maybe it's just me)


    • background music
      April 12, 2008
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      Thanks!

      I changed the word 'comprehend' to 'explain' does that sound better? I think it reads better... and i fixed the 'too' LOL I always get to and too mixed up. Thanks for leaving an honest comment.


  • lockdoubt
    April 8, 2008

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    I like it. Acrostics are so restricting, and with this shadow version (first time I've seen it), I can definitely see how it could be tough. Didn't seem like it was a problem for you though, since you were still able to get a pretty good write out of this. Thanks for sharing


  • Metaphorist
    April 6, 2008
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    Yeah, this is quite a tough form but you executed it very well. A touching poem to be sure.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 6, 2008

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    Good Job

    I've read a few shadow acrostics before and none of them have flowed this well or seemed so natural. The message in the poem is great as well. The first time I read through it I really didnt even catch the type of poem that it was. Either way you look at it. It is a great poem.


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    April 6, 2008

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    wow. acrostics usualy dont sound this good, (most often they make me sick) but you've done amazingly well,


  • xox-emma-xox
    April 6, 2008

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    Very well done! It was not an easy task to finish! I like the way it begins and ends with the same letter in each sentence. Good work! BTW: You spelt "them" wrong in the question thing! Just wanted to let you know!
    Emma ^_^
    PS Hope you get more comments!

    • background music
      April 6, 2008
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      lol

      no I mean 'whats wrong with it, then' not them that would sound a bit insulting if I said 'what's wrong with them'! and thanks so much for commenting I'm glad it was worth the read.


  • Jason Dorn
    April 6, 2008

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    :)

    What an awesome piece wow all I can say is this left me with an empty longing feeling in my stomach. I think this would say that you have painted your thoughts and emotions very well. Great job poet.


  • Perception
    April 6, 2008

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    wow.... this is great. I love how you penned it. I have no idea why people wouldn't stop and write a comment for this amazing poem. It's beautiful.... and It really has a great meaning.

    Loves

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