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Lets dance.

A dance of intimacy,
Entwined with the touch of pureness
Is caressed with feelings of love.
Becoming one; melting into each other’s hearts
Falling into secure arms.
A passion that runs deep

Into your eyes has mine locked,
And only you hold the key.

Keep it safe; I’ll be your symphony,
And together we can forever dance as one

To this sentiment we call our own,
True love.

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  • silverscent gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    This is very sweet. I liked the line "Keep it safe; I’ll be your symphony," it gave a great image.
    I will say words like "heart" are overused, I think this poem deserves better. Thanks for entering.


  • TheDemonEve
    May 21, 2008

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    "I’ll be your symphony" That line really caught my eye. Overall this is a good poem. The only qualm I have is that it is similar in many ways to other poems in the genre. Your emotional connection to it is genuine, however, and infuses the piece.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • background music
    April 21, 2008

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    I love it! Sensual and loving, but not overdone. You have described true love so well here, and using so few words to. The immagery here is beautiful. Not one for punctuation at the end of each line though, (line break stipulatates a break in flow) but that can be forgiven! This poem has come straight from the heart, it's evident.


  • Cat10
    April 20, 2008
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    such a beautiful poem! great job! good luck in all of your contests!


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    April 20, 2008
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    Excellent and great imagery


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 13, 2008

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    This is the melody of the love bringing the depth of the hearts of the lovers..a beautiful task you did..well done....


  • raggyann
    April 2, 2008
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    beautiful

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