They say you can have roots and fly
(But I'm just getting mixed)
'Cause the pieces to the puzzle
That I thought I had
Don't fit.
And my heart is off my sleeve
But I still can't get it fixed.
And somehow now in the show
You've become what I can't quit.
But the faces aren't mine
And the people move too fast
I can't grab onto my future
I don't even have a past.
All I ask is just one blast
I'm not begging to recast
All I want is plain and simple
[I just need something to last.]
And I need you in my arms
If I can't have memories.
I just need you in my hold
When there are no guarantees.
And when my life's gone underseas
I just need you.
On your knees.
I need to know you'll want me
When everyone else leaves.
So hold my hand at night
When I know I'm all alone
'Cause this house is not my home
And it's never been my own
I have no where else to go
So I'm numbing to the bone.
But don't let me shut you out
Please, remind me how we've grown.
And its funny how you'll find
That the only truth is this
-Its hiding in your kiss
('Cause you're the only one I'd miss.)
I'm dying to go home
I'm not sure where that is.
Author notes
I don't really talk about foster care a lot.
I don't like to be down on myself.
But lately the fact that I don't have a real past, or a real family, is getting to me.
Madz is the only thing that pulls me back up.
And please spare me the advice.
I don't need help... I just needed to vent.
Let Me Know
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You got some skill. Honestly I read a couple of your poems and they made me have the strength to put mine up. Your very brave...but I guess when you've been through so much, posting a poem on-line can't seem like a whole lot. I especially like the lines "So hold my hand at night When I know I'm all alone 'Cause this house is not my home And it's never been my own". I've been there. Searching trying to find my home but to only find a heart. That's risky business too because it can tear you apart. Its hard to find love these days that isn't temporary.Good luck and I hope yours last.
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I am a biological kid of my parents who provided care to others. I love all my siblings they are very dear to me. I am a foster mom now, I have been one for about 16 year. I just wanted to say THANK YOU, thank you for your insight.
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Truly Gifted
when one is able to vent while the need to reach out is so strong I beleive they are Truly Gifted...thanks for sharing this it is a wonderfully written piece of self evidence!
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This was fantastic.
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WOW THIS WAS FREAKIN AMAZINGGGGGG!
EVERYTHING ABOUT WAS SPOT ON!
SUPER SUPER STUFF DUDE! XXXX
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Wow. You blew me away(once again).
Great rhythm and wording.
structure and form.
terrific.
I love it.
The very last line pulls the whole thing together. And is definitely my fave part.
Cheers,
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Really good...
this poem is pretty amazing. there are many poems that i have written that were me needing to vent. i hope you get through this rough patch. -
Wow this really shows how you feel about everything in your past and how you want it back. I dont really have any advice because this is really good
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beautiful poem...
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aww this is really good
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I love it! I actually have several friends that were in foster care and one that is. I see them at their worst it hurts me to. I don't like seeing them confused feeling powerless. When I'm pretty powerless in the situation. I just try to be there for them. I love how emotion is engraved into each line.
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ohhh
I like
It is so full of emotion...I enjoyed it a lot...very well done
-Savina
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Wow, I'm impressed. It started off slow so I wasnt sure but you REALLY pulled it out. I normally dont comment so you did an excellent job venting.
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this is good Mia. poetry is a great way to vent. i was trying to pick out some favorite lines, but the whole poem is fantazmic and i couldn't find a perticular part that stuck out more than the rest. great job.
<3julia
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A round of applause for a poem beautfully written. Your poems always fascinate me, and this one is no exception. I enjoyed feasting my eyes on this write.Thanks for sharing. Shalom (Peace be with you)
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I loved this poem, I related to parts of it but in a completely different level. This is simply beautiful, really, an excelent job! It's like a song, the words are waiting to be sung. Everybody has a past, only that some people don't have one similar to 'everybodys' but who cares? home is where the heart is, and so is family. If you want to talk about it you sure can count on me, even though have no experience on the topic i'm happy to lend an ear and give advice if i can!
have a good day
Michelle
ps, I'd like you to return the favour ONLY if you feel like it...
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great piece..well written
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that was a great write!
the passion and emotion was
felt by the reader
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this is beautiful.
&& i absolutely love this part:
"And its funny how you'll find
That the only truth there is
Is hiding in your kiss
('Cause you're the only one I'd miss.)
Oh, I'm dying to go home
But I'm not sure where that is."
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amazing....venting can be the best poetry....
this gave me the impression of a song....was that what you were writing?? either way this poem is beautiful....
i wish you the best of luck and keep writing....
Godbless ;]
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I love it. It's beautiful and perfect. I was very happy to read this.
And its funny how you'll find
That the only truth there is
Is hiding in your kiss
('Cause you're the only one I'd miss.)
Oh, I'm dying to go home
But I'm not sure where that is.
The flow of it was fantastic. I love the last part right there. I think it would also make an awesome song. You did good.
~Lanivity
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Powerful
this was a really great write. i hope this whole situation doesn't cause you to quite writing because you definatly are gifted. the ryhmes were solid and nicely tied together. it was easy to read and follow. you really communicated your longing. this was very emotional and i'm glad i stopped by to read. keep up the good work!
~Malign
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This was a really awesome poem, emotions and all. I really loved it. It flowed real easy, and the power behind it just blows me away. Great work. Thanks for venting.
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i loved this poem and you can vent as much as you want babes
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amazing
this was so beautiful...and darling trust me on this you are not asking alot it is an absolute privelage and pleasure to read your poetry...but back to your poem....this is wonderfully descriptive and I'm sorry but I must agree with 'apoeticdreamer' the line "causes my pieces to the game and puzzle" is awkward it messes up the flow so just the one of the two....as I said before this is beautifully written. The vivid illustrations make it phenomenal and heartfelt and I know the pain of not knowing...not to the extent that you do and Im sorry for that but I really feel your pain....the last two lines I think really sum up the brunt of this tremendous work of art. Much enjoyed my friend
Always,
Teddy
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this is sweet
i like it, i didnt really know what it was about at first (tilo i read your author notes) but its good. it flows so easily it just seems to roll kind of like a song. great job. i hope you arent feeling too down, there are ways you could find out you know. youd just have to get your foster parents' help. hope everything works out for you.
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'Cause my pieces to the game
And puzzle
For the two lines above I would choose either game or puzzle not both. It feels awkward.
Thats the only real critique I've got.
Sounds like you've had a very difficult time.
Your emotions flowed out very well. I thought that thsi was a great way to express yourself. I bet you just needed to get this out.
The difficulty for the reader though is that they want to console you, but how can they? I mean gosh this is just so emotional it tugged at me as I read it. Nicely penned
*A Poetic Dreamer*
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WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW!
Best way to describe this poem. It's just...wow! I loved it, the emotion was pouring out of it and I could hear you reading it in my head. Excellent job. -
this is deep and I'm wishing I could say something that would help. All I can tell you is cling to the ones you love and let the rest fall away, ignore everyone who trys to bring you down and dont expose yourself to a lot of pain.Hang in there and keep looking up remember days when you are truly happy and relive those memories.
hearts girly
live life fully
chrissy
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