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I tread steadily on the path of which destiny chose,
constantly forward and upward always following my nose
and when the time has come for this old body to die,
just breathe a sigh of relief for me, please do not cry.
For a new life is awaiting with reborn youthful years,
to begin all over again with similar worries and fears.
The Grim reaper will always brandish his scythe in the air,
but I will face him when needed without terror or a care.
For destiny will have chosen a fresh and brand new path,
where I’ll weather the storms and always try to laugh,
for whatever the result the Grim Reaper may try to invoke,
won’t matter a tear for destiny’s path cannot be broke.
So with the dawning of a golden and glowing bright new day,
Peace will give her blessing while the Reaper looks away,
for though I lived as a mortal, only one thing is unsure,
if when I return, will it will be through the very same door ?
I may come back as a timid animal or as a mighty lion be,
but I will be equal to all, to start life peacefully and free,
to do God’s bidding as He set out in the Bible of rules,
though I be a mere animal or just another of Earth’s fools.
Contest entry :- 20 lines exactly to the above prompt painting.
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A contest entry
- THE PROMPT CHALLENGE # 3 by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such a wonderful take on the picture prompt, a triumphant and positive acceptance and celebration of the wheel of life as it turns.
'So with the dawning of a golden and glowing bright new day
Peace will give her blessing, while the reaper looks away'
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Trading on your strengths, Bazza, striding out boldly and capturing ryhmes mercilessly. An utterly comprehensive expression of the picture prompt.
And it talks about birth and death - spot on target for the contest prompt! Well done.
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Even with the rhyme which I am not so fond of this poem comes to me as absolutely wonderful! The imagery here is perfect and the thought line is also excellent!! The relegious refrence is also very relaxing!!! Wonderful wording!!
MY fav lines:
Grim reaper will always brandish his scythe in the air,
but I will face him when needed without terror or care
dark image and love the word scythe.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
pri
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What the heck .....
Thanks for the comments but is it fair to knock off points because of rhyme ? ( I am assuming this has detracted from the poem's appeal) which after all is a personal preference that was not stipulated in the rules or instructions. I have lost considerable time lately because of ambiguous or vague contest parameters and therefore have been bringing this to the contest holder's attention even though it will probably result in the poem being disregarded in the final judging. Surely technical merit and/or rhyming are added difficulties that the poet must overcome instead of the ease with which "so called free verse" is written. Even then my work comes under the heading of "Rhyming Free Verse" according Encarta's definition, so what happens now ?, after the work that has gone into this contest thus far ?????. Hope you can judge objectively without personal preferences getting in the way.
Bazza
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Well...the prompt is up in case u havent seen
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I have entered but the original reservation message remains and wont change to the entry . The link wos Ok and will take you to my poem. I dont know what has gone wrong.
Bazza
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Its working now!! I can see your poem
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hello daddy
And may I ask what you're waiting for? me?
I know your muse is at work, so I won't bother her.
Love,
Shahrzad
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