Rusted on, glued in place
Forced on, screwed tight
Stuck on, hammered down
Stretched to its limits
Tight around the edges
My smile
Teeth biting lips
Teeth biting tounges
Teeth biting cheecks
Not allowed to show through
Locked down inside
My tears
No really, it's fine
It's not like I have feelings
It's not like I have thoughts
I can't be broken
I can't be bent
According to you
Never to be seen again
Never to be known
To the outside world
Disregarded, disgarded
I threw out the key
To my heart
Rain inside, happiness outside
It will never be allowed
Never allowed to enter
My sanctuary, my body
Not a shard of sunshine in it
Ever since the day...
You took away all I knew
My happiness
Author notes
So...I found a contest with a really cool pic, but it was already closed. Oh well, I decided to write the poem anyways! Credit unknown - stolen from Verbal-Alchemist. Heres the link to the contest, its the first pic: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2397815
A contest entry
- Simple Fun by CanadianGirl1.
300 points, ended April 14, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Very Best!!!!!--contestant vote by TabbyCat.
600 points, ended May 8, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1705 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i enjoyed this. it's cleverly written. your talent is obvious
good luck in the contest peace to you
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So sad. Great poem. Good luck in the contest.
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I love the pattern you began with...I wish it would have carried to the end. I felt drawn into the experience...but then the ending fell short.
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Love the first stanza the best, I love the way the poem is brusque, yet feeling and the tenseness of it makes it more powerful.
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I really liked this one and I think we can all related to some of those feelings at one point in our lives. I especially liked the part about biting the insides of your mouth to keep back the tears. I'm definately a crier so I've been there. Good luck in the contest!!
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wow this poem was so good i can relate to those feelings.. im bookmarkin this so i can read it again! i loved this poem a lot!
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Well I am certainly glad my contest was open for you to send an entry. You've done very very well with this and I enjoyed reading it very much.
Thank You -
omg katrina this is soo amazing!!! everything was great in this i luv it so much! and you did a great job with the pic 2! Awesome!!!
*KT*
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This was quite good although it was a tiny tiny bit cliche in da middle. This isn't true I hope? 
That would be sad! obviously. Okay, now I'm just ranting.
I liked the beginning (first staza) a lot and also the second to last one. To me they were the most convincing and powerful. FUERTE!! YA!
Nice write, John Adams.
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Thanks, don't worry it isn't true I know it's cliche...but...oh well
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I went and looked at the pic and WOW you totally got all up inside that and did an amazing job with this write! I bet a lot of people could relate to this!
Wonderful
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