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Clash

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Interchanging circles
sprouting life from death
submission to your hell
leading to rebirth

Beauty flows through her
coming from her womb
youth and life to earth
from the angels wings

But death does serenade
as beauty drifts away
decaying through the times
and aching adds to pain

He takes his sword to smite
the weary tag alongs
to fall within his grasp
to the coldness of his world

 

Intertwined by fate

the partners in life's cycles

as so is love and hate

to give and take from all.

Author notes

luna-midnight
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pic credit:unknown
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  • phoenixonfire
    April 10, 2008

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    hmmmm...this is an interesting take! An excellent shift from the love and hate..very beautifully potrayed!! I like the phrase intertwined by fate.
    The flow is little clumsy but otherwise its great!!

    MY fav lines:

    Beauty flows through her
    coming from her womb
    youth and life to earth
    from the angels wings

    Very serene and beautiful!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    pri


  • Stardust-luvr
    April 5, 2008

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    well done - i love the evolution between the thoughts of light and darkness within your lines giving me an essense of peace. many blessings always xxx


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    Amazingly done. Your words go so well with the picture, I especially like the verse
    'But death does serenade
    as beauty drifts away
    decaying through the times
    and aching adds to pain'
    A beautiful mix of dark and light. All the best in the contest with it