Turn the wheel that grinds the stone
on living years over and done
greet the light that echoes truth
as the dust of souls become the seeds of youth
sprinkled among clouds of birthing rains
to fall gently on those fertile plains
wake to find fresh life to face
discover once more the depth of love's embrace
grow and learn from all in sight
and sink into whispers of dreams' delight
never deny yearnings of the heart
trust that fate will ignite the spark
as the years continue to strum its tune
pause now and then to savour the blooms
share treasured memories through stories with pride
and seldom dwell on tears that have been cried
then with the drawing of life's curtain
pass through the gates of light once again
to turn the wheel that grinds the stone
on living years over and done.
Author notes
Prompt: Write about life, death or the cycle of life in 20 lines.
Errant Panther
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A contest entry
- THE PROMPT CHALLENGE # 3 by phoenixonfire.
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This poem comes to me as a story said in a poetic form! very vivid in its description and some wonderful usage of words! ur words preach and the same time leave behind both positive and negativness! Wonderful work here!!
My Fav lines:
to turn the wheel that grinds the stone
on living years over and done.
Very good ending! gives the whole poem a rest! Beautiful!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
pri
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"greet the light that echoes truth
as the dust of souls become the seeds of youth"
These two lines stick with me more than anything; this is a fantastic write which blows the picture out of it's element and almost forces the picture to shine in a different way.
Best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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my dear friend xxx i am in awe over this write from the beauty and inspiration it exudes with every line. Not a line that didnt whisper to my heart. well done and many blessings always hun xxxx
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An excellent take on the prompt.
'then with the drawing of life's curtain
pass through the gates of light once again'
These two lines say so much. Superbly penned, good luck
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I adore every line of this!
"never deny yearnings of the heart
trust that fate will ignite the spark
as the years continue to strum its tune
pause now and then to savour the blooms"
Excellent....You show your talent in this one, Cuz!
I am so proud
Lynda
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I'm thrilled you like this piece cuz, it took much pondering to construct.
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AMAZING WRITE
Wow, I love your poem!! The cirle of life can bring many things. As we get older we tend to look back more and more. Especially when more of our life on earth is behind us then in front of us. In Ecclesiastes 3 God says, "For everything there is a saeson." So very true. This was a very uplifting poem my friend. Thank you for sharing. It was a pleasure to read
Your words go so well with the picture.
Take care,
Sandy
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