Lifeless body is worn out,
time for spirit to move on.
Embarking on a new journey,
now past lives have gone.
Delivered inside eternity,
divine light softly calls.
The reaper does his job,
souls captivated in enthral.
Within a paradise garden,
entities wander in bloom.
Amongst petals scented,
echoing sweet perfume.
Sacred musical notes,
rotating throughout time.
Orbiting celestial spheres,
dancing as they shine.
Waiting for angels foretold,
to lead them from this plain.
Revived and regenerated,
ready to be born again.
Author notes
LadyDementia
Prompt; Picture in 20 lines.
Picture credit; unknown.
A contest entry
- THE PROMPT CHALLENGE # 3 by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the image here!! The creativity of your thoughts is quite evident here!! The flow needs work but otherwise ur image is very well created!! And also ur phrases are wonderful!
MY fav lines:
Sacred musical notes,
rotating throughout time.
Orbiting celestial spheres,
dancing as they shine.
I love orbiting celestial!!!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
pri
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Wow, Awesome!!!
I like the rhyme, it gives it rhythm & flow...
And great pic too...
Thoughtful, serene & enticing...
Another great write you have here...
Well done!!!
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uuuummm....I like this I think but I am not so fond of rhyme u see...can u try this without rhyme?
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I will give it a go but as a rule I rhyme, not done free verse, ever but for you I will try
Give me some time to work on it.
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all right u can try
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